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-- Fri Nov 25, 2011 3:56 am --

COMANDO AT RENO

-- Fri Nov 25, 2011 7:16 am --

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-- Fri Nov 25, 2011 7:16 am --

comando at reno

If you hit the enter bar, you can actually break up your lines

like

this.

I've got to be completely honest. This shit was the most off the wall, idiotic piece of trash I've ever read, my guy. And I'm normally nice with feed, I can normally look over the inherent flaws of every lyricist in order to allow for the growth of their respective writing styles and room for elevation, but you, sir, have taken it a step too far. Most of those words are used in an incorrect context, or either plain don't exist. I've taken the liberty to cite a few examples below:

a obcerd_ rapper like me means alot of mesembryanthemum,

^^ Misspelled
Mesembryanthemum - (meaning "midday flowering") is a genus of plants native to southern Africa.

Ok, how in the hell does a rapper mean alot of a plant native to Southern Africa? Enlighten me.

Skantillin - Is not a word.


So, back to business. A good deal of your diction in this piece was deplorable. Many of the words that were already misused were also misspelled. Sir, were you sent by the government to anger me? Were you sent here to make me become an alcoholic again? It's working. Seriously, though, dude, the only things I can conclude from reading this jumble of nothingness are 1.) You're some super genius that actually had a super well thought out and hidden message behind this piece of work, or 2.) You just wanted to script something cool, so you looked up a rhyming dictionary and started typing rhyming words with no clear thought as to what they meant or how they should be used. True enough, some of the words could have actually been used to craft an intelligent and solid piece of work. Also, your structure is going to be a big deal to a lot of people. Most of them WILL NOT READ THIS because it's in paragraph form. Just being quite honest. I'm not downing on you for laughs, or disrespecting anyone's craft, I'm just saying write because you have a statement to express or a feeling or emotion to convey, not because you thought a bunch of words sounded good together.

Welcome to IllestLyrics, man, sincerely. Stay with us and elevate. You'll find it priceless, in the end.

P.S. - You'll also need to feed two pieces prior to posting yours and post the links into your pieces. It's the rules.