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I wrote this about a year ago. Sometimes its hard to get
back into the state you were in at the time. Yet I think I did it successfully.

stare at the moon, as it sparkles n shines....
look back at my life, what does it define...
this journey of life, walked into blind...
now i leave it, with nothing behind...

i could easily cry, but i'll take a drink...
the pain in my heart is very deep...
the silence screams, as i think...
not much longer, an i can sleep..

never followed foot prints...
barely walked in my own...
couldn't take hints...
n always got stoned...
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now Im convinced...
that Im not alone..
a lots changed since..
i wrote this poem..

i really have grown..
everything has changed..
the meddows have snow..
the roads are two lanes..

i took a bite of the apple..
jumped through flames..
I actually won a few battles..
yet they still step on my game..

so i really am baffled...
how i still stand here...
my problems been tackled..
yet I still see them clear...

history is out to get me...
the future wants me dead..
right now I will just be...
the man with to much led..

Really Deep.....You got much talent.......Like you said about emotions.....This is very deep.....I understand it......I like the way you ryhmed it......and yet nobody will every understand the poem as much as u can....nobody will ever be able to fill in your foot prints because nothin' is ever the same.....keep on changing for the best...and never for the worst.....1

thanks for the feedback, its are jobs as writers to make the audience understand as best as we can.
which makes a great writer, 1

no doubt...this piece was heart felt 4 real