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I'm endlessly witnessing people supposedly friends to me
Live lives of no dignity, asking to become my enemies
As if Kuhlerblynd is visually how the eyes of Kenny sees
Wondering where they are mentally, cause it makes no sense to me
Hope they're listening somehow through the density and arrogance
Coming at me to share and bitch how they're treated with carelessness
Sitting before u comparing lists, swearing life's unfair as shit
Talk in circles for the square to fit, but always cutting edges
Say they earned the touch of Heaven, yet put all they love in second
Ask the legs of a slut directions, not learning fucking lessons
This is much more than just confessions to all you two-faced rude snakes
Deserving to see how this boot tastes, introduction like: Shoe-Face!
Face-Shoe! People ask what you ate, tell the you drank a truth shake
While waiting for a food plate of new faith, trying to prove change
Or stay on that road til ya shoes break, find yourself on streets alone
Though I believe to each his own, there's much more you need to know
Why would I let stupid beef unfold just to simply feed my foes?
Who I wanna see eat? My bro's! Not a bunch of deceitful hoes
Showing their ass cause they have no peace at home, mindless shit starters
Concerned who can piss farther, but without balls, like a fixed father
Claim ya dick hits water, your chick's hotter, and you're some big baller
With punches which stick harder and every swing those blows get stronger
Hell, I bet those fists falter, anyone could safely send that bid
You fuckers should stop playing, end it quick! It's crazy, finish it!
I've got eighty witnesses who know what the hating business is
Try to take me inch by inch, be a bitch! Cause, truth is, shady friends ain't shit....

do we have the same friends?
thx for this enjoyable read, u def put ur work in,
i try n be real with my friends n take the games out of everything, then they play more games with me, and i end up losing because i trust them.
wtf man?

anyway good shit!
plan on recording it?
id love to hear this to a beat

Havent thought about recording it, but it was actually written to be able to do something like that... I'll give more details with what I mean by that after I get some more feed... I'm wondering if anyone will notice it.

I'm endlessly witnessing people supposedly friends to me
Live lives of no dignity, asking to become my enemies
As if Kuhlerblynd is visually how the eyes of Kenny sees
Wondering where they are mentally, cause it makes no sense to me

Started off with the usual flare of multies, and stays true to the mood set by the title. Nice opener, bruh, I totall relate to it.

Hope they're listening somehow through the density and arrogance
Coming at me to share and bitch how they're treated with carelessness
Sitting before u comparing lists, swearing life's unfair as shit
Talk in circles for the square to fit, but always cutting edges

Some more real life sentiments being expressed, here. Snakes in the grass. Feelings of entitlement. Fuck em.

Say they earned the touch of Heaven, yet put all they love in second
Ask the legs of a slut directions, not learning fucking lessons
This is much more than just confessions to all you two-faced rude snakes
Deserving to see how this boot tastes, introduction like: Shoe-Face!

The 'legs of a slut' line went hard as fuck, as well as the whole second bar, I like the boot to the mouth attitude.

Face-Shoe! People ask what you ate, tell the you drank a truth shake
While waiting for a food plate of new faith, trying to prove change
Or stay on that road til ya shoes break, find yourself on streets alone
Though I believe to each his own, there's much more you need to know

Killer flow throughout but even more so in these two bars. For real.

Why would I let stupid beef unfold just to simply feed my foes?
Who I wanna see eat? My bro's! Not a bunch of deceitful hoes
Showing their ass cause they have no peace at home, mindless shit starters
Concerned who can piss farther, but without balls, like a fixed father

Real shit on that first bar, and on the second, some dope shit. Like the multies and the whole 'fixed fathers' line, witty.

Claim ya dick hits water, your chick's hotter, and you're some big ballet
With punches which stick harder and every swing those blows get stronger
Hell, I bet those fists falter, anyone could safely send that bid
You fuckers should stop playing, end it quick! It's crazy, finish it!
I've got eighty witnesses who know what the hating business is
Try to take me inch by inch, be a bitch! Cause, truth is, shady friends ain't shit....

This closer was definitely considered wreckage to me. You spit some real shit through this whole piece, my dude. The 'fists falter' bar was fucking sick. Let em hide in the shadows, bruh. Fuck em. Props and respect on this.

Since you gave me a sweet break down heres yours

I'm endlessly witnessing people supposedly friends to me
Live lives of no dignity, asking to become my enemies
^great opener
As if Kuhlerblynd is visually how the eyes of Kenny sees
Wondering where they are mentally, cause it makes no sense to me
^ did he just say that lol
Hope they're listening somehow through the density and arrogance
Coming at me to share and bitch how they're treated with carelessness
^ probably my favorite line right here just hit perfectly

Sitting before u comparing lists, swearing life's unfair as shit
Talk in circles for the square to fit, but always cutting edges
Say they earned the touch of Heaven, yet put all they love in second
Ask the legs of a slut directions, not learning fucking lessons
^^ i liked the content here seemed fitting for the subject

This is much more than just confessions to all you two-faced rude snakes
Deserving to see how this boot tastes, introduction like: Shoe-Face!
Face-Shoe! People ask what you ate, tell the you drank a truth shake
^^ LOL that shoe face line was great and the 2 faced rude snakes double rhyme was tight

While waiting for a food plate of new faith, trying to prove change
Or stay on that road til ya shoes break, find yourself on streets alone
Though I believe to each his own, there's much more you need to know
^ Popped out like jake wheres my money.. liked it dude

Why would I let stupid beef unfold just to simply feed my foes?
Who I wanna see eat? My bro's! Not a bunch of deceitful hoes
^ really like how its staying on topic and not falling off.

Showing their ass cause they have no peace at home, mindless shit starters
Concerned who can piss farther, but without balls, like a fixed father
^^ some sick metas man like the out of the box matter of fact way u went about it
Claim ya dick hits water, your chick's hotter, and you're some big ballet
With punches which stick harder and every swing those blows get stronger
^outside the box on the rhymes but i got it

Hell, I bet those fists falter, anyone could safely send that bid
You fuckers should stop playing, end it quick! It's crazy, finish it!
I've got eighty witnesses who know what the hating business is
Try to take me inch by inch, be a bitch! Cause, truth is, shady friends ain't shit...
^^ Good closer man kept the subject rolling and had me pleasantly satisfied

Loved this man, great flow content was on it and it hit home loved it man dig when you drop gots me impress.

Thanks ALOT for the feed and break downs. Its appreciated. Hoping to get some more feed on this one...

Trust no one. I love it. Extremely relatable both literally and metaphorically. Had a few killer lines, I'm a big fan of the slut one in particular lol. To all of you I tell to fix your structure, this is what I mean ^ lol.
Good shit bro.

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Bump for perhaps a little more feed before I drop another piece.

I'm endlessly witnessing people supposedly friends to me
Live lives of no dignity, asking to become my enemies
As if Kuhlerblynd is visually how the eyes of Kenny sees
Wondering where they are mentally, cause it makes no sense to me

Simple and straight forward, but good nonetheless. Flow and multies were nice.

Hope they're listening somehow through the density and arrogance
Coming at me to share and bitch how they're treated with carelessness
Sitting before u comparing lists, swearing life's unfair as shit
Talk in circles for the square to fit, but always cutting edges
Say they earned the touch of Heaven, yet put all they love in second
Ask the legs of a slut directions, not learning fucking lessons

Really digging the multies here. Again, a straight forward but effective message with a good flow. Though, the scheme is a bit different in this part from the rest, having just three lines per multi rather the four of every other section.

This is much more than just confessions to all you two-faced rude snakes
Deserving to see how this boot tastes, introduction like: Shoe-Face!
Face-Shoe! People ask what you ate, tell them you drank a truth shake
While waiting for a food plate of new faith, trying to prove change

I like that you're getting a little more abstract here but still keeping with the message. Flow is still just as tight.

Or stay on that road til ya shoes break, find yourself on streets alone
Though I believe to each his own, there's much more you need to know
Why would I let stupid beef unfold just to simply feed my foes?
Who I wanna see eat? My bro's! Not a bunch of deceitful hoes

Some powerful truth in these bars. It seems like it should be common sense to most but still a lot of people live their lives this way.

Showing their ass cause they have no peace at home, mindless shit starters
Concerned who can piss farther, but without balls, like a fixed father
Claim ya dick hits water, your chick's hotter, and you're some big baller
With punches which stick harder and every swing those blows get stronger
Hell, I bet those fists falter, anyone could safely send that bid
You fuckers should stop playing, end it quick! It's crazy, finish it!
I've got eighty witnesses who know what the hating business is
Try to take me inch by inch, be a bitch! Cause, truth is, shady friends ain't shit....

I'll just skip to the end cause I'll start to sound like a broken record. Overall, your flow never faltered and you kept the scheme going very well. Though you had a weird spot up there but that didn't really mess with the flow at all. The message, like I mentioned a few times, is very straight forward but still came across effectively. And you never strayed from the topic plus you refrained from adding in a bunch of self-hype which is very common in pieces of this nature. So, kudos on that. This was a simple piece that did what it did very well.