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Crafted this magic in a bag with sand from Atlantis
to damage the planet like bandits who brandish their madness
the savage with the access to match it with habits an tactics
to mash it and smash the axis with axes and hatchets
the baddest to have this much skill to back it with a rap twist
and fat splits rolled with dat shit that gets ya head blown
on a red throne under a slab of dead bones and headstones
i was bred prone to hold a mic grip it an hold it tight
with an emboldened might wit lyrics hotter than a stove an pipe
no golden life but on an open mic i spit with a dopened strike
through a scope an sights i see my targets as a breathing carcass
i seek an harness the hardness and shine like heat an varnish
an artist painting pictures with his captivating scriptures
im maiming wizards with flaming scissors to slay famous victors
the nameless drifter in this environment with iron fire vents
describing a higher sense wired to be a desired an admired gent
never to retire bent I'm mastered the craft the master of rap
never after the fact I'm presently a factor in that as a matter of fact
i capture the track with rap artifacts beats match my hearts cardiac
like a cadillac i ride smoothy this my set shit its my movie
i fry newbies who deny when the truth speaks right through me!!

Got that signature "Defiance" sound going on here, by that I mean proper multies and monstrous flow. So sick it's like mother nature opened her legs and menstruated onto my brain. Fire shit bro, stay up.

Crafted this magic in a bag with sand from Atlantis
to damage the planet like bandits who brandish their madness
the savage with the access to match it with habits an tactics
to mash it and smash the axis with axes and hatchets
the baddest to have this much skill to back it with a rap twist
and fat splits rolled with dat shit that gets ya head blown
on a red throne under a slab of dead bones and headstones
i was bred prone to hold a mic grip it an hold it tight
with an emboldened might wit lyrics hotter than a stove an pipe
no golden life but on an open mic i spit with a dopened strike
through a scope an sights i see my targets as a breathing carcass
i seek an harness the hardness and shine like heat an varnish

Fucking sick bars right here, my dude.

ill be honest, yeah its cool, that you can rhyme like that, doubles, multies, cool flow, but subject matter has been the same for a while now. The more complicated ways you find to say i am awesome or whatever your saying, may very well be making it boring. Sometimes, the simplicity in words is what makes it worth the read, finding the good balance, IMO. You are good man, and i know every word you laid out so it didnt go over my head, but i like simplicity, its beautiful sometimes.

This was a nice dope verse again. you are very consistent with your shit, but I kinda feel what K Panda says, at least what I thought he meant was that it was kinda predictable. Not taking anything away from what you did, it was really dope but I feel with the skill you got, you can come up with a classic written. Try making them kinda shit. You getting there. Again very dope shit, but I think you can make something legendary and something out of the box.
Again, ppl may not agree with me, but thats what I think. And what I think is that you can do something better. Everything was dope but the only criticism I have is that ya verses seem kinda recycled, and I think its because of the amount of shit you come up with, you got so many dope verses and you seem the only active one who can come up with consistent shit every day, but I feel that they are often repetitive. Thats why I think that in the future, you should come up with a classic verse.

appreciated.. yeah this shit was on the self hype tip.. but also I'm writing this shit in-between phone calls.. but chea one of these times i'll craft a classic up and drop it.

Crafted this magic in a bag with sand from Atlantis
to damage the planet like bandits who brandish their madness
the savage with the access to match it with habits an tactics
to mash it and smash the axis with axes and hatchets


prolly my favorite bars of this whole piece. Straight in flow and content. Nice shit mah dude.

i was bred prone to hold a mic grip it an hold it tight
with an emboldened might wit lyrics hotter than a stove an pipe
no golden life but on an open mic i spit with a dopened strike


This shit right here ^^^ was nice too.

The multies were crazy here. They didn't really sound forced throughout and there was no real faults to them. The flow was flawless too. I never stumbled once and just managed to slide through without any trouble (like with your mom...yes...that was uncalled for). My only real problem is that it doesn't actually mean anything. I get that you are just trying to flex a bit, but it'd like to see you go out of your comfort zone a bit and really stretch your boundries as a writer. Keep at it man.