Page 1 of 1

Free Flow

Posted: Mon Oct 24, 2011 4:17 pm
by MonuMental
**This verse isn't meant to contain any specific content, I'm fighting my writer's block the best (and only) way that I know how: To write whatever comes to mind and just go with what happens. That being said, I hope you enjoy. If not, open mouth, insert cock.

I say forever after, "Fuck Polly, 'Mary wanna cracker?'",
My marijuana's status should have it carried on a platter,
I'm bigger, smarter, and badder, my wallet is swollen fatter,
Than the asses that I'm tapping to get a pinocha shattered,
I'm the coach and the batter, the dope and the smoke it gathers,
When you're toking it motionless, hoping to go to Saturn,
Like you were broke and emotionless knowing that nothing matters,
So the sofa precociousness is throwing you over rafters,
I'll get a zone clutched and smoke it until I'm stoned stuck,
Get em toned up when I get buck and let the chrome bust,
Fill a home front with fire like on a blown blunt,
Incinerate a witness to cinders and blow the bone dust,
I spit scriptures that flip scripts and rock the Richters,
Top the victors, leave em cock blocked and rocking dentures,
I will not stop, I'll be the richest and rob the richer,
Scar and victimize the signifying targets with a trigger,
I'm a martyr on adventures to star in the velvet, endless,
I bargained with God and he made me part of his own militia,
Spreading my wings and jumping a pen is the sword I'm gripping,
I've written more killer shit than a toilet forging a hitlist,
Get this, I fathom deeper than even Nemo's submarines show,
Where would he go if he knew the evil that I can see grow,
When the seas roll and people get low and watch the steeples,
The government's the devil, he's creeping up on the needful,
Wishing for peace, fools, only the casket is ever peaceful,
Locked up in fetals how does it happen, pass the needle,
It's a disaster piece of pain killing my brain, all of me knows,
If the weed don't make grief go, the earth can let me sleep cold.

http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/the-m ... 24572.html

http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/the-r ... 24555.html

Re: Free Flow

Posted: Mon Oct 24, 2011 5:29 pm
by leeroi green
Fave bar "wishing for peace, fool, only the casket is ever peaceful"

I liked it eventually I will edit with a breakdown

[ Post made via Android ] Image

Re: Free Flow

Posted: Tue Oct 25, 2011 2:57 am
by CrazyPete
There may be no specific content, but definitely have a theme (and one of which I approve). Great flow, I can hear the beat in my head while I read it...

If this is you with writers block then I definitely need to check out what you did before.

Re: Free Flow

Posted: Tue Oct 25, 2011 7:34 am
by MonuMental
Appreciate the feed, y'all. Uppin.

Re: Free Flow

Posted: Tue Oct 25, 2011 7:46 am
by Defiance
I will not stop, I'll be the richest and rob the richer,


love that line right that
good shit solid flow like the pace you set and kept up

loved it though.

Re: Free Flow

Posted: Thu Oct 27, 2011 2:53 am
by 88SkyLink
I actually like this. It's weird seeing you write something without any particular subject, but this is really good IMO. It was structured very good, Flowed pretty nice, and the multis were ON POINT plus you had some good witty punches, which is something I rarely see from you IMO. I think you could've fitted in some wordplay, but thats just me. However it was a really good piece ... Keep it up fam

Re: Free Flow

Posted: Thu Oct 27, 2011 2:53 am
by Momeijah
I liked that line Defiance quoted too lol. Flow and rhymes were awesome on this, I like drops laced with inners. A lot of it was pretty random but yeah I think it all kinda ties together. Only line I didn't like was 'I've written more killer shit than a toilet forging a hitlist,' but I suppose it's not like you were trying to spit classic shit lol. Overall it was dope, my favourite lines were:

I'm the coach and the batter, the dope and the smoke it gathers,
When you're toking it motionless, hoping to go to Saturn,
Like you were broke and emotionless knowing that nothing matters,
So the sofa precociousness is throwing you over rafters, (in a strictly rhyme/flow sense)

Get this, I fathom deeper than even Nemo's submarines show,
Where would he go if he knew the evil that I can see grow,
When the seas roll and people get low and watch the steeples,
The government's the devil, he's creeping up on the needful, (for content).

Re: Free Flow

Posted: Thu Oct 27, 2011 7:26 am
by DaPrince
I spit scriptures that flip scripts and rock the Richters,
Top the victors, leave em cock blocked and rocking dentures,

For a free flow I enjoyed it more than I thought. As stated above, the multi's were definitely there and in addition to the two lines I quoted, I also liked the toilet hitlist line (although I think it could have been structured better to be more hard hitting).