Hip Hop Forum

Ok..so i only got 1 verse at the moment but will be adding soon..

Stuck behind bars.. Its that prison life
Once a week we see our families but with visits timed
And i.. miss the time i had my own way
Cus i have to phone mates on a shitty phone rate
Why did i put myself in this posistion
I went the wrong way.. I made a shit decision
So now i sit in prison.. rolling burns
Different mix of people.. lifers getting old as dirt
The wrong life to take.. now my mind is made
I'm never coming back cus it a timeless place
Where.. time will take you onto some serious drugs
But if your clever enough you'll stay clear from the stuff
Now listen to me.. it aint a place to be
Trust.. cus i had that big bird facing me
And it was plain to see... i had some issues
Some family problems.. some drugs misused
So now i.. sit in my cell regreting the things i did
Thinking how stupid i was to leave a few finger prints
And now i'm figuring how i got mixed up in this..
Money orientated.........for the love of risks!!

liked it was an honest look into jail/prison which is a shitty fucked up place

nice drop, not too complex which sometimes kills pieces like this.

Well it was a simple rhyme about prison life. I was not impressed because you only touched on how it made you feel, not on how it is and what really happens when you are locked up. I would have rather seen you get a little more complex and get deeper into the way prison really is and changes you. I dunno.. not overly impressed

cool..safe for the critism..will look at it in another light and refresh it!

I know this is true. Some real talk here. thanks for sharing.
Flow was nice!! Diggin the stylo. keep writing.
peace

You did well enough to get your point across consistently. In my humble opinion, it was all pretty basic stuff. Nothing to ooh or ahh at but with time and dedication, elevation is sure to come.