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just looking for feed on it thanks

It was dope as fuck, man. I felt like when the strings came in in the first verse they may have been a bit too loud, maybe your vocals coulda been upped just a little bit. On the singing tip, you killed it, imo. You matched the mood and you didn't sound like anyone's clone, you sounded unique, which is always good. I bumped this a few different times and felt it every time, bruh. I'd say pull this for placement on a tape or something you may want to make in the future, bruh. I'd bump it.

thanks fella still fishing

I also think you could maybe up your vocabs just a little bit. You do have a unique style and delivery, and its always nice to hear something fresh when it comes to those two things. You follow the beat really well. The part after ebony seems to have you a little tripped up. I thought the chorus was pretty good. It might have been good to almost double up your vocals on the hook, to give it more presence. Just something to try. Obviously I dont know how it would sound until it's done, but it's an idea. I do agree with Panda... Some parts it seems like you had trouble trying to fit everything in that you wanted to, but its only in a couple spots here and there, and its not extremely noticeable. Otherwise, everything seems to be progressing really well man. Keep writing, recording, and dropping! Props on this track!