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Tha Dark Side -
The Destruction of Man ..

hook by Blake:

''the destruction is somethin'
..like what we work,
this is just earth,
what is it worth...''

x2

Kulture:

I overwrite about the bright light at the
end of peoples tunnels not in excite,
I keep up the good work and hoping
its worth as I fight for my life on this earth,
people fighting for there turf is it really worth the delight? for their life on
earth?,
Instead of going for attack I make a
track just so I can get a snack is that too much to ask?
I write repetitive cause I’m starting to become insensitive but i’m still creative & active,
I get defensive when it becomes effective, impressive as it seems as I’m infective,
I’m done with this rapping acting, I wanna start landing and asking
instead of blasting,
crack smack bash sound of a sad back
track but without the splash, I feel like a white trash,
Its a big city and yet some people struggle to see clearly, this is strictly
theory,
I don’t feel guilty as my life can be risky, biggie had it tricky, and he died
quickly,
this was a story from the untold soul, I’m in self control but yet I fall deeper
into the black hole..


BlakeDowns:

threw times eyes, blake downs, a mind
dies, teams fight, teeth bite,
where you dont sea-life,the oceans fathoms so deep you cant see light
for some it dont seem right, im not a fan
of beasts, tsunamis tore apart families infested rivers where kids are
swimming and hanging more than canopies
insanitys growing,underwater wars
are eroding, submarines exploding,
an individual drowns at least 6 feet beneath among 1000 dollars worth of clothing,
i laughed as the sharks devoured right in their own path
i rap like cash, we were living adequate
while the rain took their past we laughed, as girls faces got hacked,whacked, slashed, and
SPLASHed
we ripped it, dark side a.k.a. "d.s". gots
those swift kicks and quick hits
we split wigs and shape-shift kids, i devour emcees i treat em like their my
grannies biscuits,
quick buisness, plenty buisness,
so babies are dieing surrounded by
many liquids..

Hook:

''the destruction is somethin'
like what we work,
this is just earth,
what is it worth...''

x2

Proverb:

the destruction of man is based on lust and greed/
it infects all of us like a malicious disease/
it dont matter what race color gender or creed/ the past repeats itself thats a warning we should heed/
man will destroy himself its just our destructive nature/
its all about the haters and the politians
chasin paper/
droppin a-bombs on civialians no democracy just a crater/
man is just the creation destroying the creator /


Tha Dark Prince:

Once engulfed in my flames, you could
jump in the gulf but still be inflamed |
I am the rage, the ultimate plague, as I
burn n turn Man's desires into what they become ta hate |
I am what made Lucifer stand out, get smacked out, and end up in the place,
where I could never be tramped or stamped out |
Once this world is destroyed, I will rise
and proclaim it my time, the lust y'all have enjoyed, so I will now make it all mine |
I hypnotize those in sight when I dance with the wind
An allure, I lure them in then proceed ta have 'em skinned |
I start at their soles and end with their souls
I sparked Earth's episodes
and now end on the same epic note.....


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Haha about time you posted this

Was a cool lil piece here. Was pretty dope. Now. Criticism. Kulture wasn't on topic at all, imo. It was self hype and had nothing to do with the topic and didn't fit with anything anyone else said. Dark Prince had the tightest verse, imo. Proverb's last two lines were fuckin wreckin. Not being an asshole towards anyone, just calling it how I see it. All in all it was an enjoyable read.

Kulture:

I overwrite about the bright light at the
end of peoples tunnels not in excite,
I keep up the good work and hoping
its worth as I fight for my life on this earth,
people fighting for there turf is it really worth the delight? for their life on
earth?,
Instead of going for attack I make a
track just so I can get a snack is that too much to ask?
I write repetitive cause I’m starting to become insensitive but i’m still creative & active,
I get defensive when it becomes effective, impressive as it seems as I’m infective,
I’m done with this rapping acting, I wanna start landing and asking
instead of blasting,
crack smack bash sound of a sad back
track but without the splash, I feel like a white trash,
Its a big city and yet some people struggle to see clearly, this is strictly
theory,
I don’t feel guilty as my life can be risky, biggie had it tricky, and he died
quickly,
this was a story from the untold soul, I’m in self control but yet I fall deeper
into the black hole..

This doesn't even start nor stay on topic. If the theme's destruction of man, why is the verse about...random things?

BlakeDowns:

threw times eyes, blake downs, a mind
dies, teams fight, teeth bite,
where you dont sea-life,the oceans fathoms so deep you cant see light
for some it dont seem right, im not a fan
of beasts, tsunamis tore apart families infested rivers where kids are
swimming and hanging more than canopies
insanitys growing,underwater wars
are eroding, submarines exploding,
an individual drowns at least 6 feet beneath among 1000 dollars worth of clothing,
i laughed as the sharks devoured right in their own path

After this, I couldn't figure out what you were trying to do.

i rap like cash, we were living adequate
while the rain took their past we laughed, as girls faces got hacked,whacked, slashed, and
SPLASHed

What? You just forced rhymes here.

Proverb:

the destruction of man is based on lust and greed/
it infects all of us like a malicious disease/
it dont matter what race color gender or creed/ the past repeats itself thats a warning we should heed/
man will destroy himself its just our destructive nature/
its all about the haters and the politians
chasin paper/
droppin a-bombs on civialians no democracy just a crater/
man is just the creation destroying the creator /

Way too short. If you're going to write a verse about something like this...I mean you can write thousands of lines on the end of earth. Execution needs work too.

Tha Dark Prince:

Once engulfed in my flames, you could
jump in the gulf but still be inflamed |
I am the rage, the ultimate plague, as I
burn n turn Man's desires into what they become ta hate |
I am what made Lucifer stand out, get smacked out, and end up in the place,
where I could never be tramped or stamped out |
Once this world is destroyed, I will rise
and proclaim it my time, the lust y'all have enjoyed, so I will now make it all mine |
I hypnotize those in sight when I dance with the wind
An allure, I lure them in then proceed ta have 'em skinned |
I start at their soles and end with their souls
I sparked Earth's episodes
and now end on the same epic note.....

This is the best verse just for staying on topic.

yea my verse got fucked up,my structure looks like shit wtf


threw times eyes, blake downs,a mind dies,teams fight,teeth bite,
where you dont sea-life,the oceans fathoms so deep you cant see light
for some it dont seem right, im not a fan of beasts, tsunamis tore apart families
infested rivers where kids are swimming and hanging more than canopies
insanitys growing,underwater wars are eroding, submarines exploding,
an individual drowns at least 6 feet beneath among 1000 dollars worth of clothing,
i laughed as the sharks devoured right in their own path
i rap like cash, we were living adequatewhile the rain took their past
we laughed, as girls faces got hacked,whacked, slashed, and SPLASHed
we ripped it, dark side a.k.a. "d.s". gots those swift kicks and quick hits
we split wigs and shape-shift kids,
i devour emcees i treat em like i do my grannies biscuits,
quick buisness, plenty buisness,
so babies are dieing surrounded by many liquids..