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One

Posted: Tue Aug 23, 2011 8:05 am
by Soulo
Yeah…
another late night my glazed eyes look towards the gray skies
and to anyone who's staring out we share the same ties
suppressin' emotions I'm testing the notion that what is outta sight
well I'm expressive trying to clear my clouded mind
so hear me out
I often think about what it's like when times get hard to live in
and how to write the story of my life from start to finish
memories from the brightest lights to darkest limits
a dreamer's poem small with a big heart within him
lines in couplets matching rhymes and drum kicks
after I'm gone for good I wish someone could
recite my lyrics to any kind of public
and I'm penning some gold to the rhythm of flow
my grip gets tighter everytime I've been in the cold
just a student of a scholar who knows
true heaven is when you learn to choose beauty over dollars and hoes
and I pray whatever's up there can pardon the globe
cause offense tends to be the best form of armor we hold
nations change maps I wanna grow up to map some change
and live unscripted cause I'm too real to act on stage
I wanna see the world through a bird's eye view
hoping I'm high enough to finally see what my third eye knew.

Re: One

Posted: Tue Aug 23, 2011 12:08 pm
by Enders
Not to shabby. You started nice with the flow and rhyme scheme but as u went on both kind of slowed in appearence. The thought process was cool, painted ok pictures, but I woukd have liked to see more imagery. Not a bad drop, but you shoukd take the time to give some other drops feedback so yours can get better rotation. Selfless, not selfish

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Re: One

Posted: Tue Aug 23, 2011 12:22 pm
by AntiMaTTer
actually shit was pretty dope homie... nothing really to complain about. flow was illy from start to ...finish. word up.
do what you do and stay at it

Re: One

Posted: Tue Aug 23, 2011 12:30 pm
by Proverb
dope drop man keep em comin nice imagery had meaning