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im a military minded soldier prepare for war/
crazyiest shit ya ever heard have you beggin for more/
armed with ak's tech 9's and rockets/
tanks jets jeeps c4 packed in my pockets/
my fuckin soldiers offensive formation/
fire heavy artillary on your location/
casulties of war collateral damage/
wont ever see your family again they'll manage/
since your a psychologist you must be in my brain/
like kurt cobain you can spit but you'll leave more shit stains than hanes/

eh its aight

-- Fri Aug 19, 2011 10:46 pm --

this cat better show

u such a fagget u 4get how much dick u GET IN YA REAR.. so u better run when MY VERSES APPEAR coz my TENDENCIES DEAR is to beat u paralized..yea i'll 'seize all Pro motion' and END HIS CARREER..


see ur only packin jabs kid, we never got to DETECT YA MERITS, ull BE WRECKED AND BURRIED in TEXT, YA HEARD KID? and my Blades will give you more Extended Cuts than a DIRECTOR'S EDIT...


and yo scripts fagget? packin no puns, only MAMBLING N NO DOUGH, so dnt call me mad but this CAT IS A FRAUD YO put the steal on this pest or a Wring On His Neck till he RESEMBLES TO FRODO..

Bleh.. im too rusty, sorry 4the delay, my verse might be a bit stiff, didnt flow as i wanted.. its aight tho, votes up



VOTED HERE:
http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/mosar ... ml#p179541

Before I even get into it: YOU BOTH ENDED YA DROPS FEELIN LOW...not the biz, even if the drop is bad, come out with confidence. Verb, a battle is about attacking your opponent and you spent half the drop talking about yourself. Psych, you agreed with the 8 hr so it's always best to adhere to it and you might want to work on the formatting of your flow. With text battles appearance is part of the mix I mean I know it's a 5 bar battle, but I can't tell where one line ends and the next starts.

Now on the actual content:

Multies- Psych for using both end rhymes and inner rhymes with the multies, actually one of the more enjoyable parts of your drop

Personals- tie, most of the drops could be used on anyone, not really catered to the opponent

Flow - Proverb, this has a lot to do with formatting and verb made his drop a lot more presentable, easier to read, and easier to flow

Punches - Proverb you had the strongest lines of the battle:

casulties of war collateral damage/
wont ever see your family again they'll manage/ <---Felt that
since your a psychologist you must be in my brain/
like kurt cobain you can spit but you'll leave more shit stains than hanes/ <---Nice

Psych, gay punches are done to death, the multies add a lil flavor to your punches, but they aren't too strong overall, the flow kinda kills it.

Enjoyment - tie, not really on either too hard

Overall: this would be closer if Psych's drop was formatted and flowed better, but as things are MVGT: Proverb

proverb- your shit aint that hard but still you overcome.
with flow, weak punch.

Pysch- you fucked up the whole shit...... you shoulda formatted it well b4 posting

MVGT-Proverb

2-0 Unless Psych wants to question Hems vote.

mvgt verb not the best just went alot smoother i mean i actually liked pshychs bars just then really get the feel of it

i lost by ko, update this joke

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