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Dear Lord

Posted: Thu Aug 18, 2011 6:29 am
by pablo1212
-Ive been here for a month at this very same hospital
-Facing all the pain has remained as an obstacle
-Cancer's been the problem and I wonder if its solvable
-I heard somebody tell me that with you anything's possible
-And if its really true , do you think that you could help?
-Cause I doubt that I'll be able to continue bymyself
-Can you answer me a question 'Why you make my living tough?'
-And sometimes I think its better if I started giving up
-Cause if im not laying down in the emergency room
-Then it means that im unconscience in the surgery room
-I just hope it dont turn out really badly at the end
-Cause im wishing to return , to my family and friends
-Cause they nurse me the most and they hold me in close
-So for me to see them suffer is what hurts me the most
-As I can feel my thoughts and emotions getting deeper
-And I can feel my heart , and my body getting weaker
-Im tired of the headaches and im tired of the fevers
-Why is it so difficult , just to take a breather ?!?!
-Lord I really need you and I need you every night
-Cause im trying to stay strong but im losing in this fight
-And People always tell me , "dont let it defeat you"
-But if I leave this world Lord , then I wanna meet you
-Ive told you all my problems so you could get to know me
-I hope you write back..... Sincerly , little Joey



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Re: Dear Lord

Posted: Thu Aug 18, 2011 9:04 am
by Arvincible
very touching piece, i enjoyed the read bro keep writing!


my fave bit


-As I can feel my thoughts and emotions getting deeper
-And I can feel my heart , and my body getting weaker
-Im tired of the headaches and im tired of the fevers
-Why is it so difficult , just to take a breather ?!?!
-Lord I really need you and I need you every night
-Cause im trying to stay strong but im losing in this fight
-And People always tell me , "dont let it defeat you"
-But if I leave this world Lord , then I wanna meet you


I can relate to this because i personally have family in the hospital and it hurts... good shit man

Re: Dear Lord

Posted: Thu Aug 18, 2011 9:22 am
by pablo1212
Thanks man , I was inspired to write this cause of a friend whos going through this ... but good looks on the feedback

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Re: Dear Lord

Posted: Thu Aug 18, 2011 9:27 am
by MonuMental
This was pretty deep man. You did your thang on it in an easily understood way. I wouldn't tell you to change anything. This piece has noble intentions, respect.

Re: Dear Lord

Posted: Fri Aug 19, 2011 12:15 am
by Alejandro Kerrigan
Nice man, really touching and well written. I can realte to this having my mom go through a similar experience. Big ups and keep writing pablito

Re: Dear Lord

Posted: Fri Aug 19, 2011 3:10 am
by Proverb
props man love it keep it up !