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Tourney Topical: Careful what you wish.

Posted: Tue Aug 16, 2011 6:24 am
by Sir Kevin O Shea
Late December, I got an invite from dorinda for drinks and dinner
she strolled in looking cold like winter and I noticed she was slimmer
she must be crunching and accounting the numbers for her new figure
been wishing for a rendezvous for two since she moved here from Denver
we slow danced to nineties slow jams while I smelled purfume and leather
hypnotized by the hedonism from fantasized indiscretions of us together
under the illusion that fantasy and reality were truly connected
I tried not to lose my perspective and keep our fusion protected
the dome bobbing back and forth and her forehead slapping my bellybutton
her submission to my inhibitions prevented intuition from telling me something
after releasing and some sleeping I discretely went to the bathroom
looking through the medicine cabinet I uncovered where her past looms
A perscription slip for a STD, a bottle of pills and a tube of cream
now I have a new wish....I wish was better at choosing dreams

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Re: Tourney Topical: Careful what you wish.

Posted: Tue Aug 16, 2011 1:13 pm
by Loon E Lou
You cockface. This is nice man. I was like "nooooooo" at the end. I almost felt black readin this. Haha jk. Nice vocab and nice picture painted. Short an sweet. A vivid read my kind sir

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Re: Tourney Topical: Careful what you wish.

Posted: Wed Aug 17, 2011 2:25 am
by Enlightend
Loon was telling the truth.... I hit the last lines like dammit.... nnnoooooo lol.... but the story flow everything was hottness with ur usual humor and good vocabulary twisted in... keep up

Re: Tourney Topical: Careful what you wish.

Posted: Wed Aug 17, 2011 7:18 am
by OboliskC
one word: WOW!!!!
this was real good. when i started i didn't know what to say about it , but as i kept reading it i felt like i was reading a story .it sounds like poetry in some way, it was like a climax of words that erupted from the page. so all i gotta say is that was fire and you set it a blaze.