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Whats going on my brethern? I figured I'd post this up after noticing a request for it in the written rhymes section a few months ago. Here is a link to the thread for those interested in checking out the lyrics.

http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/e2dap ... 17170.html

The song is basically me and my label mate "Beastman" spitting like crazy back2back over the 4th chamber instrumental. Its going to be on an upcoming mixtape we are releasing (*cough*3openspotsleft*cough*) as well as label sampler. There are a few spit sessions with all my label cats on the projects, hence the .1-.5 connotations.
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Let me know what you guys think though!! I go second in the song.

Aside from that, I'd love some feedback on my most recent single, "Road To Tomorrow". My first music video was shot & edited for the track by an affiliate of my Artist Service company. The song itself I bled and is on a "really real" note.

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yea shit sound pretty good guys... could have some parts cleaned up a bit but no complaints really just stay at it.

pretty nice remix, rhymes was tight, overall nice job...keep it up

Anti- thanks! what did u think needed tightening up? That kinda constructive criticism helps spurr our progression.

Shyst- will do sir! Thank you for taking the time to listen and leave feedback.

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Well some of the flow kinda sounded a bit forced or rushed in some portions. or the double time can be practiced more. just some fine tuning and tweaks. this stuff sounds way better than any track id do lmao

aight the intro..is a lil long imo..
Beat is huge on that wu tang shit...

first verse.. whoa delivery and flo are on the whole time..announciation is on..i like the lyrics...

second verse ..this was pretty on throughout..i liked the delivery and multis were good..lyrics were aight ..i hear
what TOYH is talkin about theres a small juggle on ya flow
somewhere near the last 6 bars or so....very minor tho..

i will say the mixxing sounds Niiice..id have to say the only thing you might wanna fix is that lil flo stutter ,it is a mixxtape so it is what it is..but for feedback's sake you might wanna do that..

okay on that Video tip....Pretty good stuff ..i'd say it looks well produced..looks like you did the best you could with what you had to work with..nice camera work..coulda maybe used a few more background tho..u know different spots maybe imo..the song itself had some meaning so thats coo..i just didnt have any real WOW moments..no hate tho you def deserve a big ups for doing this..keep grindin..1

keep em comin man good shit anti summed it up pretty well

Very cool guys, thanks for the indepth feedback tre!
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