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Its one of them days feel like nothings right/
Yet nothings wrong at the same time yet im pumping fright/
Something light on the shoulders yet it weighs a ton/
Tryna put a finger on it but i cant seem to place the one/
My days are done, it's seeming i've lived my life/
But im only 23 years old, how can i say it right/
May the price of the life i live be too much for my budget/
Stuck with melacholy and depression like im seeming to love it/
Fukk it, my soul seems beaten torn weatherd n bruised/
Better to loose then to not try, slow to teather a noose/
Better to choose my own fate then let the others decide/
Butterin lies, to keep the souls around, witnessed to their shuttering eyes/
Mothering tries, from helpful souls but their failed attempts/
But tries nonetheless, and from the chest is where the help decends/
O well, it ends when it ends, if not now then its soon/
And untill that day happens i'll still be found in this room/

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i like this fam short but sweet. nice multis here and there too, stay up

word.

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I like this man, this is a prime example of putting all thoughts and feelings into words, real rapping. It wasn't those kind of bragging raps, but about the shit you're going through..and was expressed with decent multis, alright lines, just lacked the strong metaphors, but that is to be expected because as I said, it wasn't those kind of bragging writtens.. but as Kause said, it was short and sweet..Keep it up, peace

Nice and classic..... short but sweet, man i like this shit
good multies and killah flow
keep @ it man .

Yeah, I agree with all of the above. But fuck the length, as long as you vented with a genuine honesty. This is a dope lil piece man. Raises feelings I'm sure we all deal with at times.

when it come from the heart it sounds way more better.
and that shit was nice bro. i can see any flaws.

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