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**DO NOT TAKE OFFENSE if ur relationship is LOVE BASED**

women r a complement of men and vice versa
we enjoy a respectful compliment, even if it sounds like rehearsal

there is a difference between nice n absurd
so listen closely and observe

this is an ALERT to every PERVE! roaming this EARTH!

As i pass, if u like my ass, it doesn’t mean u can grab it, or harass
women r not orderves, where u can help ur selves and self serve,

Do i need to spit this verse in reverse to keep ur perverse thoughts in reserve?
perves u will get what u deserve, ur eggs in a easter basket for u to preserve
your dead body in a casket and ur d*** blown off the this universe!

did u invest time with me, talkin? this doesnt give u the right to start STALKING

just converse, but know when to take no for an answer
or you will only get on my nerves, like a tumor n cancer
there is a big difference between, gentlemen and sick perves

if ur on a date great!, but if u want sex u gotta ask first, or else it’s RAPE
every time a wild thot escapes and u get the urge to use force n degrade

like a sword used to carve letters on wood
my words in your mind will 4 ever b tattood
this rhyme will set your mind back to the real you

every RAPIST should be incarcerated without any food
beaten and decapitated to prevent these crimes for good!
sounds exaggerated? may b but we’d have safer neighborhoods

before you get the chance to penetrate, i want this thought ur brain to generate
that female that to YOU, is just an UNKNOWN FACE, put ur MOTHERS picture in her PLACE
would u rape ur own mother, sister daughter? if ur answer is yes ur a disgrace!!!
you are not human so u deserve be dismembered and disappeared without a trace lol
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Post by For Real »

the rhyming was brilliant in this drop. i really flowed through the whole thing without stopping, which was really good. the vocab in the rhyming was good too, so that was impressive.

i have to say though, i disagree with the topic. you see many accounts of girls accepting the compliments and attention from guys, and acting as though the recipicate, but as soon as the guy makes his move, the girl acts like he just completley stepped out of line, all the while knowing that she was giving him the impression that she was interested. it's happened to both me and a lot of other guys i know, and it makes the guy feel like a dick for making the move, but the girl was playing him in such a way, that he was forced to go in for the kiss or dance with her whenever they hit the floor.

good drop anyways lol. looks like you spent a bit more time in this one, and it reflected as well.
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nice post,nice but the start was a bit out of rythm the first time i read it so fix it a bit and write it in another format,aye? plus,why do you space your lines like th? fix those but above all,gooooood post girl
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I ain't a fuck head type dude so I feel you. But males and females do that type of shit, just sayin. But anyways, I always enjoy reading drops from female lyricists. Not enough of them around. I have no suggestions for improvement as far as technique or content, you know what you want to do and you build upon and consistently deliver on that idea without going off topic. Nice drop here, real nice. Fav lines:
Do i need to spit this verse in reverse to keep ur perverse thoughts in reserve?
perves u will get what u deserve, ur eggs in a easter basket for u to preserve
your dead body in a casket and ur d*** blown off the this universe!
Keep doin the damn thang, chick.
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aww guys ty fo ur feedback!!! and keep in mind this was meant for STALKERS and CREEPS not at all against normal guys <3
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I like the point of view from a woman's perspective approach.
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Post by Arvincible »

if ur on a date great!, but if u want sex u gotta ask first, or else it’s RAPE

lol awesomeical this line had me chuckle a bit

you had a great rhyme scheme at first and it grabbed my attention.. but it did honestly fall of as it seemed you were more focused on sending the message than staying on your rhythm...which is natural because the message is obviously the point of the whole piece and is most important, but overall its supposed to stay in tune because your writing is a form of art and u should maintain your style throughout to really develop a unique identity.

so yeah you have a great perspective on things so write more and more so we can keep pickin your brain and what not...just to make you better :)
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I have to admit, this was really good..This is the kind of shit that'll make you think twice about fucking an unknown bitch..the line that stood out to me was
before you get the chance to penetrate, i want this thought ur brain to generate
that female that to YOU, is just an UNKNOWN FACE, put ur MOTHERS picture in her PLACE
would u rape ur own mother, sister daughter? if ur answer is yes ur a disgrace!
Overall a good piece, but boys will be boys, when we see a bitch, we want a bitch lol..peace
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Post by vanity »

LOLOL only wrote it for STALKERS AND RAPISTS not for u guys :)
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Yeah The Rhymes Were On Point. And Nice Storyline
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