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Vanity vs Grimm

PLZ DO NOT VOTE, I POSTED THIS BCUZ IT WAS MY FIRST AND ONLY BATTLE AND I JUST WANT FEEDBACK TO IMPROVE....AND BCUZ IT WAS FUN!!!

VANITY:
Mr. Grimm you act like a mystical master, but you sound more like a lyrical disaster

be still my beating heart, is your’s still beating you old fart?
from the start i thought you only listened to Mozart and sold art,
i don’t doubt you were a blast in the past, cuz your a God to alot of retards (gods = crew)
you were an original member of the rat pack, entertaining for Humphrey Bogart,
(rat pack = frank sinatra, sammy davis jr. etc.)

every morning at 6 o’clock, your girl needs to jumpstart you with electrical shock
when you wanna f***, she pops out the tweezers trying to see if she can find your c***
climbs that wobbly jelly like belly all d way to d top, she looks like a lizard on a rock (u)
old geezer give it up its time to stop, your a joke like Eddie Izzard and Chris Rock
(eddie izzard brit comedian)
you are a stoned version of Fred Flinstone living in the stone age in Bedrock

your a living fossil i wouldn’t be surprised if you were one of jesus’s apostles
Mr.Grimm, face old age with a grin, take one for the team and go back to gospel
so quit this crap with rap and go take some aspirins and drink the whole bottle (commit suicide)

after this battle you should really retire, not cuz i beat you but cuz you really look tired
you need more than weed to keep u inspired and alot of coke to get you wired
so like Donald Trump says “Mr. Grimm your fired”!!!! and no you wont be rehired

**its all in good fun Grimm u kno i luv ya**

GRIMM:
“Vanity”...you’re just another “sin” getting violated
You’re more useless as a “pupil” then when my eyes are dialated (pupil=teach/eye)
“never trust anything that bleeds for 4 days and doesn’t die” (women..LOL)
That’s what my dad taught me and from what I can Tell he didn’t lie
So watch your step before I make you bleed more then your “monthly visit”
This girl is looking like her breakfast is at least a hundred biscuits..
14 eggs,20 pancakes, and two pounds of hashbrowns..
Her looks alone in school got Vanity voted as class clown
Take out the I-T-Y..DAMN..she’s as big as a VAN
When she wears a sweatshirt she looks like she’s smuggling hams.
“Vanity” is usually a sin committed by people that are attractive..
But you have the type of face that say’s “I just got my ass-kicked”
I’m “pulling strings” to make sure I leave you bloody…Tampon
she’s in the dark on every subject like she forgot to turn the lamp on
Not too bright…NOPE…her brain’s not that lively.
I’ll stomp on this “ANT” and poison her like “IVY” (V-A-N-I-T-Y==I-V-Y//A-N-T)


I still luv ya Vanity…LOL

LMAO actually yo shit kinda had me rolling in some parts that were random as shit. aiite now for a battle. i take a completely different route and focus on nameflips/worldplay and punches....you can too but try messin with your style more. i use a 1-2. set upline then punch line, rinse and repeat.

The verses seem sort of poetic to be a match up. lol

This was an alright battle, certainly not the BEST one tbh. It lacked the personals, and it was more like 'Imma do this to em like ..........'. I would say that Grimm won because he came out stronger, it was a good battle in a sense that it was the first from vanity..so keep it up...peace

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Lol, it was entertaining as hell, imo. Like I say, don't change up, just keep doin you. Self discovery is the path to elevation.

k thanx for the feedback i really appreciate it!

Great Verses From Both sides Keep up the text's