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Beautiful (Remix) Collab

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A Remix collab... I got my lyrics up.. so you can see what im talking about bout... if you feelings it.. jump on let me know...

Im just trying to reach to my family, without ever knowing what my plan are gonna be
Days have come from the best to the worse its like a curse going in head first
Still today im trying to live up to the situation when my family spilt up
was it my fault? did i do something wrong? if i did something better could they have stayed strong?

This was the plan from the whole beginning, feeling so much pain that my soul starts screaming
feeling so much pain that my heart is bleeding starting every day with a sorrowful feeling
Do all things happen for a reason can i sit back and stop believing
in all the stuff that i once believed in or do i keep going and start a new season

Meditate to elevate my skills in place and penetrate my very fate
i start to create and pray for one tough act to follow
one tough act to follow pray for one tough act to follow
here today pray tomorrow that you dont have to walk a 1000 miles

(hook)
in my shoes just to prove whats its like to go lose
get back up and move on
just to see what i have been through
feel my pain deep inside
All the thoughts i have in mind
search my soul what you'll find
walking blind but this is my life

(x2)
Dont let them say you cant do it all
(No Nooo)
they are just trying to get you to fall
(oh ohhh)
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Philippians 4:13
I can do everything through him who gives me strength.

Psalms 23:4
Even though I walk through the valley of the shadow of death, I will fear no evil, for you are with me; your rod and your staff, they comfort me.
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Re: Beautiful (Remix) Collab

Post by Loon E Lou »

yea man. i like this. good beat to spit over. i was really feeling the emotion in it. heart felt lyrics. my type of music. i think any constructive critisism would be maybe just breakin up the verse and hook. as in different takes. sounds like your runnin outta breath on a few parts but nothing crazy. reciting it a few more times before recording it usually helps me out. I would of liked to hear some seconds and ad libs. iunno if thats your type of stuff but you should try playin with it.

this is the makin of a dope real life track man. good delivery and good material.
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Re: Beautiful (Remix) Collab

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yeah for sure man, when i was recording it.. i usually split it all up but i just kept going haha.. plus this is just a 1st draft to ge tthe sound and concept out for some1 to jump in with it... but thanks always enjoy and take your opinion to heart..
Last edited by Deciple on Sun Jul 31, 2011 11:59 am, edited 1 time in total.
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Philippians 4:13
I can do everything through him who gives me strength.

Psalms 23:4
Even though I walk through the valley of the shadow of death, I will fear no evil, for you are with me; your rod and your staff, they comfort me.
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