Hip Hop Forum

Back again, more raps, war attacks/
before tracks, I was a lame now I got whores on they backs/
the takeover, games about ta change extreme makeover/
like the ice age but my regimes way colder/
couldn't melt us if you brang the heat from the sun/
and my shit bang like im packin the heat for a gun/
quick aim the beatings begun/
look what became a beast eating up the beef till its done/
when Cons speaks its won, the flow im sick wit it/
hit the boards now Fiasco cant put a kick in it/
push, im threat like the button and Bush/
never scared, emcees I never fear/
I'll bring an end ta ya career/
so please don't ever dear, ta mess the crew/
one shoot, one kill, one of the illest bringin in live for you/
tell me who flows wit a better style/
ask any child, my raps aimed for the youth like a pedophile/
don't need ice and checks, just dykes and sex/
lifes ta deaths, capture A and Rs and slice they necks/
now that's true street shit, dropped when the beat hits/
peep this, all that bullshit you speakin can keep it/
you aint thug, its no longer a secret/
Assassins addictive like a drug when we spit/
Nas said Hip-Hop is dead, listen that's how it sounds/
but Hip-Hop aint never dead, look how many support artists of the underground/
only mainstream rappers talk about, hoes, cars, and loot/
I flow bars of truth, guard the youth, if you really hard then shoot/
your fake, ask the people we don't believe you/
why be afraid if you bleed like I bleed dawg we equal/
use words as weapons, let blood spill, till ya thugs killed/
ya so sweet, Con gon eat, I love real

probably sounds better on audio.. seemed more like a mainstream style...pretty basic as far as the lack of multis and creativity

this was alright, alotta shit was worded awkwardly and alotta the multis didn't match syllables, work on your structure you can't have one bar being 20 syllables and the next being 12

only mainstream rappers talk about, hoes, cars, and loot/
I flow bars of truth,

when Cons speaks its won, the flow im sick wit it/
hit the boards now Fiasco cant put a kick in it/

Them were some of the more creative lines. Overall it was a little choppy because of the mis-matched syllables. Like all killah said.
I still enjoyed reading it though 8/10

interesting style, definately more of a piece for audio. as far as multies, you atleast were doing mroe then one syllable pretty much the whole time, so i wont really call it simple

don't need ice and checks, just dykes and sex/
lifes ta deaths, capture A and Rs and slice they necks/

lines like this kept it interestin, nice flow

some of the multies were off on syllables:

never scared, emcees I never fear/
I'll bring an end ta ya career/

i tend to do that sometimes as well, itll work on audio

overall i like it, only thing that wasnt to shit hot was wording in some spots, but nice drop

this was aight, it prolly could use a better structure and a better rhyme scheme in some areas, but over all it was pretty good.

some lines i liked and thought kept the verse interestin....

when Cons speaks its won, the flow im sick wit it/
hit the boards now Fiasco cant put a kick in it/

Nas said Hip-Hop is dead, listen that's how it sounds/
but Hip-Hop aint never dead, look how many support artists of the underground/

only mainstream rappers talk about, hoes, cars, and loot/
I flow bars of truth, guard the youth, if you really hard then shoot/

keep it up man!!!!