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[fuck you and the lie you told me, 5 months down the drain fuck everything i said it don't mean a damn thing]
you brought me tears and pain as i look back and remince,
about how this whole love thing of our doesn't make sence
i moved on but it's hard to walk away
you're on my mind every second of the day
i keep on tellin my self i aynt trippen
but the pictures i keept flippen(of us)
then i quit all this crazy ass crap
but you came runnin right back
draggin me right back in
to this stupid shit again
i guess i was blinded by this thing called "love"
[fuck you and the lie you told me, 5 months down the drain fuck everything i said it don't mean a damn thing]
i do miss you holding me, our sweet talks and you holding my hand
days and weeks went by then the lies started and thats what i didn"t understand
so i kept tellin my self it's not true but then i saw you with her
so i left with out sayen a word
walken away with tears runnin down my cheeks
fellin sorry for the next bitch he meets.

WOW, THAT NGGA IS A GONER...LOL

NICE!

awh my bad thanks though.

Not bad, raw emotion was there try to increase line length with more content, try using basic imagery to pull the reader in, also spell check drops I'm not a good with grammar infact I'm dyslexic but spelling mistakes fuck up the flow and throw readers off, just a heads up

Peace

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This was coooool....a well used topic but you handled your own on this...the hook was cool...u kept a cool little flow going which made it seem interesting..overall a cool little piece

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This was pretty good, Big Meik. I'm glad you're starting to be more open with your outlet for expression. Keep doing you.

very nice i liked it, i agree about more focus on structure but it was real good i write alot about love so i can relate to what ur saying