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Rate this for ya boi Young Dank

Posted: Sun Dec 03, 2006 1:36 am
by Young Dank
we don't believe that u niggaz are hardcore forreal
no skillz, no deals, probably can't afford to pay billz
shit, living with ya damn momma ain't trill
a 2003 Tahoe ain't nothin to brag about, chill
me, I'm breezy, my truck matches the year
nigga I'm in overdrive, yall stuck in first gear
I'm throw up my set, but I'll never Dip
If I do, I'll body my self with what I keep on my hip
you little prick gangsta don't ever do shit but bump ya lips
ya'll don't listen, guess yall don't understand my tips
but when my tips turn hollow, I'll be more than Amazin' to follow
that probably went over ya head, I'll explain it tomorrow
I toldya so, this nigga got that Hova flow
outshine any nigga, got a supernova glow
u got one female fan and i made her bend over slow
I thought i told u lpg niggaz, its over bro
I can't believe I leave feed on Slimms songs
u need to fall into that whole Hov dugged for Jim Jones....holla back


to dig a hole beat from Jay z and Swiss beats

dissin a few people I know, holla back with some feed

Posted: Sun Dec 03, 2006 4:44 am
by Ambiguous Realm
umm... maybe it sounds better on audio... or not.. im not feelin it too much.. i guess it didn't have enough multis to entertain me with the flow i seek but it was better than most of the newcomers i see

Posted: Sun Dec 03, 2006 5:01 am
by Young Dank
back to the drawing board

Posted: Sun Dec 03, 2006 6:28 am
by 8th
first off, read the rule for this forum: http://illestlyrics.com/board/new-rule- ... t2163.html


I toldya so, this nigga got that Hova flow
outshine any nigga, got a supernova glow

^i guess that would be my favorite. Overall it was, meh. You have pretty good rhyme structure, but like ekoms said, I didnt have enough multis for me. It was just kinda simple. I would up your vocab and try to encorporate more multis into that ryhme structure and i think you'll elevate crazy fast. But keep droppin verses. Stay up.

Posted: Tue Dec 05, 2006 12:36 am
by drunken jesus
this was alright, for a diss it ain't really have too many punchlines, like everybody else said the rhyme schemes pretty weak work on writing a lil more complex