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dude im definately feeling this drop considering i just did a topicvery similar just today.

my favorite lines were



"The public just witness and undergo countless tensions
By those who broadcast & afford cash, without making mention
Of the poor class, and the numerous amount of their deprivation
The government just wants to perform yet another replication"


"Normal people are felony-driven, not to mention that our enemies living
Living up in the government with a bad entourage, Jeremy Piven"


very solid multis, the escapolofy line kind threw the rhythm off but the overall flow was a pleasant read bro. ur diction is exceptional so keep it up with the meaning drops and if im on ill continue to read your drops

This was a very interesting topic. Felt the message. This world is going deeper and deeper into shit!! Thanks for sharing your views.
Diggn these the best:

The public just witness and undergo countless tensions
By those who broadcast & afford cash, without making mention
Of the poor class, and the numerous amount of their deprivation
The government just wants to perform yet another replication
Of the dark age, where we embark rage, all upon a shark cage
History will repeat itself, where we go back to the start page

NICE^^^

The suffering and the struggling is like a virus gone widespread
The worlds turning biased, one sided, cuz the Right side's dead

FELT^^^

thanks for the drop!
PEACE

definite sum teachings for anybody's azz...great

this is legit man i like all the multies and stuff my da dwould love this he's the type of person who thinks this to lol

thnx for the comments

Nice work... flow was there... message was clearly written... it was on point on most aspects... keep up

Dope, enjoyable no doubt, I felt like this one had more meaning than the overload drop that you killed, but the fire was still there. Do you perform these writtens?

nah, should I?

With bars like these, you should definitely consider it.

impressive i liked it alot great topic
these were my fav:

"I see people suffering, constantly making wrong decisions
While innocent people are being ridiculed by their religion
With an implicit mass divison, heading to a collision
So sit and listen, before we run out of our provision
Theres no vision, cuz no one sees the problems we’re facing
Innocent lives ruined, just cuz of the God they’re praising
The media's involved really should owe the rest apologies
Humans rights mean nothing if we’re forced into escapology"

thnx vanity

88skylink wrote:

I see people suffering, constantly making wrong decisions
While innocent people are being ridiculed by their religion
cool opener. sounds like a topic or free verse starting off

With an implicit mass divison, heading to a collision
So sit and listen, before we run out of our provision
Theres no vision, cuz no one sees the problems we’re facing
Innocent lives ruined, just cuz of the God they’re praising
...really diggin this fourth line, sounds like somethin id say. I like the word choices and flows good

The media's involved really should owe the rest apologies
Humans rights mean nothing if we’re forced into escapology
I cannot acknowledge the fact the masses worthy of college
Are indirectly being limited by subliminal knowledge
really like the approach with this, quite the conscious piece.. and has solid concepts and still good rhyme scheme

The public just witness and undergo countless tensions
By those who broadcast & afford cash, without making mention
Of the poor class, and the numerous amount of their deprivation
The government just wants to perform yet another replication
like the lil flow change up with the "afford cash/poor class" pretty cool, this is pretty solid thru and thru so far

Of the dark age, where we embark rage, all upon a shark cage
History will repeat itself, where we go back to the start page
We’re all trapped under the laws, with the politicians laughing
They claiming commiseration, while they’re just morticians having
The time of their lives, as they spit in our graves so harshly
So you really think we’re being helped by them? Hardly
The suffering and the struggling is like a virus gone widespread
The worlds turning biased, one sided, cuz the Right side's dead
still, everything is up to par with everything else ive said. still like the hold on the direction and keeping it smooth and also an in depth
vocab i think

Normal people are felony-driven, not to mention that our enemies living
Living up in the government with a bad entourage, Jeremy Piven
The death poll rises, men continuously dying and fallen ladies
A life of a victim, are seen through the eyes of foreign babies
like the metaphor used...would have liked to have seen more of em, but
in pieces like this too many can construed the flow etc.
These isolated lands are reeking of death, and as the essence
Spreads, more is fuming by fresh corpses no younger than adolescent
Troops of brave soldiers are sent to glorify their nation
But over the slave shoulders, they die and mortify their patrons
The military are fighting the weak, and the death of their age's certain
We’re like puppets on a string, being ended by the stage curtains
solid ending with more metas..

im actually pretty impressed...looks like you should have entered the tourny..or are you? idk. But this was a Lot of bars and you kept it consistent homie. i really dig the direction of this too, ive wrote a lot of stuff like this before but i like the way you brought it. good shit fam

thnx fam

thnx