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what do you guys think?

well the beat and hook are dope obviously.

you got a nice lil presence to your delivery. kool slow delivery to it. i like how you ended the first verse. second verse wasnt as entertaining as the first. i dunno, it just didnt have the same snap as the first. plus the second verse wasnt mixed to well as far as leveling goes. its pretty low man. turn that up jus a couple notches and ittle flow nicer as a song.

pretty nice little mixtape beat ya got here. keep at it man

Im liking the beat choice mos definately. Besides that it is a very enjoyable track to me. The alley oop line was dope as shit by the way. The 2nd verse would probally need a little polishing and I think it would be complete. Other then that I was nodding the whole time keep it up bruh!

whoahhhh...dude what happened? Like it almost felt like two completely different people between verse 1 and 2. I LOVED your first verse, the flow, delivery, kicks, the alley-oop...priceless. Then the second verse felt off beat, without a paddle. Not sure what happened, but if the second could come as right as the first it would be a gem.

i actually finished my 2nd verse right before i recorded and i wanted to record the song before i lost the flow so i never really got the chance to memorize to 2nd verse. but i think ill definitely memorize before recording from now on. and good lookin on the suggestions they help out a lot yall

hmmm beats got an old skool feel..whoa..im gettin a real good
vibe on this shit...trippy to me tbh..but still on point..

HMM no lie i dont know if im just high(cuz i am) but that hook sounds raw as fuck bro..is that a sample?

lyrics on da verses were good deliv fit the vibe and seem
mixxed decently..i think it could be pressed or mastered diff tho tbh..but thats more opinion..no doubt tho I'm Feelin it..haha...1

@tretru its actually the instrumental to the jay-z song feelin it. the hook is already part of the beat so ill take no props for that. but thanks for the feedback!

the flow is to the beat besides a couple forced rhymes in the second verse but i was still feeling it very good drop.

beat was cool, liked the presence, maybe feel off in points, flow was decent, lyrics were okay, couple forcedl ines like the guy above said, verse 2 fell off compared to the first, that needs patching up if you do fix it, but not bad here

man anyone who doesn't know this beat already really needs to take a hiatus from making music to go educate themselves on the classics. You can't know where you're going if you don't know where you've been, and if yall aren't up on reasonable doubt, you've got a long ways to go.

Anyways, the joint was straight. It's hard to jump on classic songs like this and redo them, because they're likely to get compared to the original. Elzhi is one of my favorite rappers of all time but he did a remake of illmatic and it completely ruined the album in my opinion.

same beat thats on The Bar Exam by Royce... good shit man... i liked this it was a good flow... some of ur mixing was loud and quiet... couldn't hear portions of ur verses then some of it was too loud... over took the beat... but lyrically i liked it... good drop man work on keepin ur vocals WAVS a certain depth while u record... make sure it pretty much all matches... so ur not too loud and not too quiet keep it even... good shit tho man... keep droppin

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