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The In-Sanity

Posted: Thu Jun 30, 2011 12:39 pm
by Arcane
pause the expedition, and come view the exhibition/
find a decapitated skull if you misuse the preposition/
send you to an unwary decision, check the definition/
just call me "Nasir Jones" the way i carry this tradition/
facial features are bashed, your on the bleachers just trashed/
so try dropping the "feedback" when your "circuts" are slashed/
slipping and splashed, your flesh is ripping in half and gashed/
i display assassination while you cats are gripping the cash/
you squares can't join the circle, my flow is controversial/
your girl had me "in good hands" like an all-state" comercial/
lyrics in a state of dispersal, you can diss i got the reversal/
dropping "planetary bombs" out of "this world" im universal/
im on "top" like a "missionary", eyes of a visionary/
knowledge of kings just to "shelf" your "itinarary"/
your thoughts are not necesary, scars like i walked from the military/
words leak from my core so they call me a glocked dictionary/


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Re: The In-Sanity

Posted: Thu Jun 30, 2011 1:01 pm
by MonuMental
Another dope drop, Arc. These bars were rippin:
facial features are bashed, your on the bleachers just trashed/
so try dropping the "feedback" when your "circuts" are slashed/
slipping and splashed, your flesh is ripping in half and gashed/
i display assassination while you cats are gripping the cash/
Keep em comin, bruh.

Re: The In-Sanity

Posted: Thu Jun 30, 2011 1:07 pm
by Arcane
word up thanks man haha will DEF keep it goin

Re: The In-Sanity

Posted: Thu Jun 30, 2011 1:41 pm
by ippiki_17
Good shit! Your writing style is nasty bruh!

Re: The In-Sanity

Posted: Thu Jun 30, 2011 1:56 pm
by Arcane
haha thanks dude :P
tryna improve even more

Re: The In-Sanity

Posted: Fri Jul 01, 2011 12:38 am
by Defiance
haha arcane rips it again

yo this shit was fire.. great usage of vocabulary, and punches.. like the tossed in shit. flow was on point.. the feedback line killed me man... nice shit

keep writing home

ART

Re: The In-Sanity

Posted: Fri Jul 01, 2011 3:04 am
by Arcane
word up dude! and yeah will def keep writing

Re: The In-Sanity

Posted: Sat Jul 02, 2011 1:23 pm
by complexity
Arcane wrote:pause the expedition, and come view the exhibition/
find a decapitated skull if you misuse the preposition/

^a bit wordy, good though.

send you to an unwary decision, check the definition/
just call me "Nasir Jones" the way i carry this tradition/

^carry on tradition, would have worked too, good reference.

facial features are bashed, your on the bleachers just trashed/
so try dropping the "feedback" when your "circuts" are slashed/

^Hmm, ok..

slipping and splashed, your flesh is ripping in half and gashed/
i display assassination while you cats are gripping the cash/

^damn son!

you squares can't join the circle, my flow is controversial/
your girl had me "in good hands" like an all-state" comercial/

^Nah.

lyrics in a state of dispersal, you can diss i got the reversal/
dropping "planetary bombs" out of "this world" im universal/

^the metaphor was better than the rhyme, cool though.

im on "top" like a "missionary", eyes of a visionary/
knowledge of kings just to "shelf" your "itinarary"/

^decent.

your thoughts are not necesary, scars like i walked from the military/
words leak from my core so they call me a glocked dictionary/

^nah
I'm going to give this an 8.4 out of 10. I though the rhymes were good, the ideas were cool, but the big picture, there wasn't really one. Oh well. Still pretty entertaining.

:text-bravo:

Re: The In-Sanity

Posted: Sat Jul 02, 2011 1:34 pm
by Arcane
lol... aight

Re: The In-Sanity

Posted: Wed Jul 06, 2011 5:57 am
by leeroi green
"yo man arcane is dope" -L.Green

Re: The In-Sanity

Posted: Wed Jul 06, 2011 6:35 am
by Arcane
"much appreciated chief" -Arc

Re: The In-Sanity

Posted: Wed Jul 06, 2011 6:44 pm
by Thu Hem
this was dope man...
good usage of vocab

nice drop.

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Re: The In-Sanity

Posted: Sat Jul 09, 2011 1:03 pm
by Enlightend
nice vocab and flow was on point would like too see u be a little more lyrical... good though