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I promised you, I told u that I’d love you till the end of time
Little did I know that I’d make a mess out of everything and that you’d never again be mine
You were all I needed to get by
Haters and speculators all around, each with their own alibies

I always thought that you were heaven sent
I’m grateful for the time I’ve spent with you in my life’s moments
You are undoubtedly the best I’ve ever had
The fact that I’ve lost you drives me crazy, insane and mad

If its anything… I wouldn’t say that it was all for nothing
I’m officially missing you
I’ll always love you… that much is true

I’ve messed up and now we’re apart
Always and forever, you’ll always be in my heart.

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There's not much I can say about this, it's pretty deep and the imagery is clear, i do think it could be worded better and be made a bit more complex if you're looking for criticsm, coz these type o' things are kinda common, good drop though

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Fanx Dark side #do ma fav. Show me wachu mean by worded better...

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Well this is poetry.. So it's grounds to do anything you want and write how you see fit, ofcourse only the poet would understand the poem best of all, so I'm not one to say how you should write i did say it was a good drop, my only advice was, as this you see a lot of writers writing on this same subject, it's very common so if you like, looking for it to stand out and appeal much more to the audience, than it should be more sophisticated, i.e include a unique structure etc. But as I said, only you would get the real meaning of this and my comments are only opinions and nothing more, keep droppin

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I agree with Prince, dude. A writer will always do what they do the way they do it. It was a cool lil piece, nothin wrong with it, but like he said, nothin that just put it out in anyone's face either. But it said and did what I felt you meant for it to. Good drop.

Fanx guys - much appreciated

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good drop bro..heart felt, was diggin it..

Try getting deeper into the situation between you and this chick, like... Why did she leave? How did it make you feel? Instead of saying things like "I messed up and now we're apart" tell us how you messed up and how she reacted, how you felt about it. Ya dig?

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Yea bra - I dig ..thanx a mil

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Metahores are a oets best friend.

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