PANDA...LOCK ALL MY WRITTENS FROM NOW ON

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KING RUM12
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PANDA...LOCK ALL MY WRITTENS FROM NOW ON

Post by KING RUM12 »

If u readin this u Mite as well CHECK...
looked at all ur skills it's obvious I'm the BEST...
Start a evolution cuzz my word comPLEX...
N them first 2 writtens wuz just some bomb THREATS...

Even if I'm (cooler blind) I still kill EASY...
I be up on the site like illest lyrics need me...
Baby ass rhymas bout to toss y'all a binkie....
N these next couple bars u prolly wont believe me...

U haven't even met me u cn tell I'm real...
Scott backed out !? damn that wuz my meal...
I don't mind takin losses to hide my skill...
N I see u feeders struggling to define my skills...
KKING RUM!! All except admins shud Neal...

Panda lock all my writtens cuz I don't need feed...
Who's next on my list PROBABLYTREED...
or ne body else thas down to bleed...
Ur crews will flee...away from me...when they see me breeth fire under the SEA...or wen I grow muscles n turn GREEN n knock down houses n eat TREES...all u cn say is stop PLEASE!!..but I'm possessed by GREED...u all r different emcees ..but all BREEDS..

KING R.

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-- Sat Jun 25, 2011 8:51 pm --

But I devour all breeds*
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Post by M33Kish »

WHERE THE HELL ARE YOUR LINKS!!!! this was pretty cool though, it had some funny parts.
The Meek Shall Prosper... So they say :P
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-_sarcastically speaking_-

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Post by pest »

where the fukk is my name...

garbage.

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at ya' age you have a 5star skillz,
and believe you're gonna make in the music biz.
i love ya' sht...most definitely...
keep up the good work bro!
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lol...ur name doesn't need to be in there..

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LOL thats all i can say
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Basic. Step yer multies and wordplay up.
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Post by KING RUM12 »

I disagree but ...ill still do dat

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-- Mon Jun 27, 2011 7:17 pm --

I must confess m a lyrical extraterrestrial ...
But I bless these checks like I have 4 TESTICLES...
punches hit hard enough to turn pests into vegetables ...
KingRum in ur spectacle...my disorder is profectional....

My Words sizzle upon of those who commence in giggle...
These Elmo's of tickle...steel ball of mass bars drop to make earths ripple...u simply suck like YOU on Popsicles ...
Ur not worth 2cents nor nickles....n I hate eating sweet things like weak skittles ...I peak n elevate ur still stuck in middle...black holes occur when I don't speak in riddle...

Kings Philosophy ain't know body stoppin me...
Ur OBSOLETE ...better come with a POPPIN fleet...!
A knock beliefs...that ne emcee is as hot as me...
Self hype when I'm off the leash....eating u is the only way I'll know that Ima beast...capeesh!
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Post by The Gonz »

Of course you disagree, you're clearly in denial. By basic, I didn't just mean the obvious such as your actual rhyme schemes themselves. Sure, a two syllable rhyme scheme is considered a multi, but its still quite lacking. And the -able and -ical multies are super played, especially when they lack creativity. My thing is that you aren't saying anything at all, its a bunch of nonsensical phrases with rhymes at the end, weak rhymes at that. That's why I said step up your multies. Rhymes like giggle and tickle and ripple are hardly complex. Don't be arrogant, take the damn advice for what it is, constructive, honest criticism. I'm not just saying this shit to try and start beef, I'm trying to get you to realize that there are areas you can improve on.
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Post by KING RUM12 »

I said ill still DO THAT blindness....u didn't see that post..I'm not downing ur feed...

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Post by TreTru »

yo...@ Rum...
Rucks has a point..he's just givin you honest feed ..we ALL need to elevate our skill set...some more than others you especially.....your concepts are decent but thats the extent..if you really wanna improve learn to take constructive criticism.....1
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