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Enlightend wrote:why u hating on him
just stop it this guy Probably cried, lol... well now hes hurtin more
cus hes not ready for beef! treeds a fuckin herbavore

[A bit played, not bad]

were all haters... yeah u nice and every one else is lying
naaaa dude u aint bringin the heat, so u surely wont survive it

[good line, could have been a bit more scorching]

you asked for innocent beef, a chance to mention me in ya verses
first u need a pull up ya panties and put down ya purse kid

[Nah I dislike that line]

cus im dangerus cause death quick painless as i run threw ya plain sick
like embalmin fluid cus in bombs im fluient.. u cant speak my language

[I didn't like this cluster fuck of a bar at all]

see kats like u come out in litters, pussy rappin bitter and meek
posting ur rhymes on the board... you should of been hitting delete

[Not bad for a start]

admit ta the streets ur weak, ur wack shit brings down the forum
while im the king kong in this thing dog.. and ill crush u while snoring

[I don't like this at all really either]

crashin ur buildin thrillin action this comic im crashin and killin,
blastin this villin illin while ur caption is peeling

[Not a bad rhyming spree]

subtractin ya dealins.. u got more na ur broke i say u a bum
ur all done.. son u couldnt come wit fire power if i gave u a gun

[Not a bad line, once again for someone who is new to this.]

see i got love for the ohio so kiddo ill be backin up cincy
but Toledo kid im laughin at u actin like thats been where cripts be

[Ok, good personal]

that just sounds stupid dog

have u losing heart when the ruger spark till his chest is empty
now lifting within me.. you hear the sounds of the semi
pistol whipin, missile spitting ur mind back to reality
cus in actuality if this cat battled me id beat his ass casually
taking out that "yall are just hating cus im nice" mentality
in fact ur corpse is already foul ta me, bringin the beast outta me

[The best part of the drop to me was this]

Overall. I don't think the diss was bad at all, considering you and treed are close to on the same level. You're good at not forcing things completely and that's really excellent for a new guy. Work on the rhyming, the punches, and you will be getting exponentially better.

I'm not disappointed. I thought you did pretty well.

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