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Notions

Posted: Fri Jun 24, 2011 2:34 pm
by MonuMental
I don't talk sweet, I spit truth, present proof,
Rip roots where boots tread, a spread where lies grew,

My eyes knew, the ink was loosed, the page bruised,
The same dude as me was a sage engaged to,

An outlet for rage on a stage he played through,
Fountains of pain he bathed in and lost youth,

He fought too, ridiculed by the fools he talked to,
Brought to a decision, as a mission he sought booths,

Spitting admissions of visions he held inside,
Bled and cried, salt and crimson, demons exorcised,

Sweated and tried to fix life, promised a compromise,
Mic'd his inner thoughts, knowledge killing the lies,

Spilling his pride, pad, pen, grim looks in his eyes,
Went to war against himself, fully militarized,

Relished the ride, no telling if he was dead or alive,
Emerged spitting blades, a surgical edge in his rhymes,

Deadened at times, reddened his eyes, hoping to cope,
Struggled, choked, fighting ropes affixed to his throat,

Mumbled and moped calling angels, "Deliver me hope",
Stumbled and broke on a bed of all the lyrics he wrote,

Tumbled and groped for a grip to avoid the fall,
Opened his eyes, spied in red what it said on the wall,

"Other worlds await to sate the hunger you've woken",
He let go, fell forever gripping lyrical notions.
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Re: Notions

Posted: Fri Jun 24, 2011 3:01 pm
by probablyTreed
intricate as fuck, u snapped!

Re: Notions

Posted: Fri Jun 24, 2011 3:06 pm
by MonuMental
I appreciate it, bruh!!

Re: Notions

Posted: Sat Jun 25, 2011 3:52 am
by Thu Hem
Dis shit.... was explodin man,

He fought too, ridiculed by the fools he talked to,
Brought to a decision, as a mission he sought booths,

i love this line man and the rhyme scheme too
good drop bruh... Respect.

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Re: Notions

Posted: Sat Jun 25, 2011 3:59 am
by MonuMental
Appreciate it, bruh.

Re: Notions

Posted: Tue Jun 28, 2011 5:33 am
by Defiance
DOPE man.. DOPE MAN.. digging the lead on stylies where it was constant rhyming very intricrate in your dealings man.. digging it.. keep on dropping

Re: Notions

Posted: Tue Jun 28, 2011 5:37 am
by MonuMental
You already know, bruh.

Re: Notions

Posted: Tue Jun 28, 2011 6:11 am
by EcKsTaSy
killed this one, mental went mental

Re: Notions

Posted: Tue Jun 28, 2011 6:23 am
by MonuMental
Good lookin out, bruh!

Re: Notions

Posted: Tue Jun 28, 2011 7:41 am
by Enlightend
I liked this alot deeply poetic and lyrical at the same time...also the flow was seamless .. keep up

Re: Notions

Posted: Wed Jun 29, 2011 1:06 pm
by Borat
Yo yo yo I like it man, flows very well for the most part. You also have some Purdy clean multis in there bro, and I'm digging the lyrical content. Keep them coming man for real

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Re: Notions

Posted: Thu Jun 30, 2011 2:23 am
by Alvin
Overall, the rhyme schemes were impressive. Although there was this one part that read wierd "the ink was loosed". Other than that pretty dope man. Seems like your able to deliver your emotions through a good rhyme pattern and vocab, so kudos man.

Re: Notions

Posted: Thu Jun 30, 2011 11:32 am
by COMPUTERCHIPS
Nice pen! this was fun to read. dug the whole thing i really like the first couple of bars and the militirized line. thanks for dropping this! dopeNess!!

Re: Notions

Posted: Thu Jun 30, 2011 12:44 pm
by ippiki_17
That was so dope my dude, you inspired the shit out of me. I love your stuff.

Re: Notions

Posted: Thu Jun 30, 2011 12:58 pm
by MonuMental
Appreciate it, all!!