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THESE SOME OF MA MIXTAPE LYRICS, WANT A GOOD FEED TO SEE IF IT`S OKAY.

Verse 1

Like magazine pages I'm flippin em niggas over
Flow sicker, punch harder, I'm a one man soldier
Kiss you with a jab knock the fuck out of em jaw,
Every punches in ma lines leavin traces n sore
I'm so sick in the brain I burn faster than flame,
Throw ma fist around sudden break the nose of a lame
And those on the lane I kill like a train that derailed
And shift your date like how carter-IV got delayed,
I aint sane I'm sicker than doctor Oz patient
With crazy thought feel like smackin ya head on a pavement,
Is like am in the basement you can still feel ma accent,
I aint american but I got the 100 percent
I'm on the tougher side you compare me to a kingkong
Got the bitches round ma neck and ma shit`s em ring tone,
2-Em is a beast neckrope a nigga with babwire ,
Against yall muhfuckas with the rhyme I conspire,

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yo this sounds like it has good flow to it.. kinda basic in premise. maybe elevate the intelligence of the piece.. tighten up the rhymes and multis and youd have something here... keep dropping

I agree with def. Good read but yea i think u just need to step up the complexity of it. Stay up yo

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