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"STOMP STOMP STOMP STOMP" (I AM NOT JUST A KING IM ALSO A GIANT)

ALL MY LIFE I BEEN FROWNED UPON AND STILL ONE U CN COUNT UP ON
THEY USUALLY ACT DIFFERENT WHEN I KEEP DROPPING THESE ALPHA BOMBS

AND IMA NICE GUY ONE U WOULD PROBABLY LOSE TO
PLZ DONT LET THAT ROOKIE SHIT ON THE LEFT OF THE SCREEN FOOL U
THIS IS WUT I DO DO THE KING OR MASTER LIKE IM BULU
IF U THINK IM DECENT NOW U SHOULD SEE ME IN THE BOOTH GOIN COO COO

IDONT LKE TO GRAPPLE TELEPATHIC POWERS PICK U UP BY UR ADAMS APPLE
HI IM KING RUM WOULD U LIKE T BATTLE
I KILL OPPONENTS AND BRINGEM WITH ME LIKE THEY LIKE TO TRAVEL
AMPUTATING LIMBS TO FITTEM IN MY SATTLE
I THINK IM THE NEW DEFINITION OF ASSWHOLE

IM USUALLY IN A VERY NICE MOOD
TILL U PISS ME THE FUCK OFF AND I GET LIKE THAT PROTOTYPE DUDE
ALOT. OF BATTLERS SMELL LIKE PREY OR SUM OVERNIGHT FOOD
CANT EVEN TELL THE DIFFERENCE WHEN I WASH IT DOWN WITH OVERNIGHT BOOS

U CANT CHASE WUT IM AFTER OR ELSE IM ON YA ASS LIKE A T REX OR A PHILASORAPTOR
TATTOOS LIKE THE GUY FROM FASTER
MY USER NAME SHOULD HV BEEN AWESOME RAPPER
IF U SAY IM GARBAGE UR AN AWESOME ACTER

COMPETITION NOBODY IF UR OFFENDED SO SORRY IM NOT TRYNNA ACT COCKY
BUT IF I BUILD A CREW WERE CONTROLLING SHIT... ILLUMINATE
A LEADER IS BORN FROM MOM NO PAPI
STEP DAD TREATED ME LIKE A JEW N HE WUZ NAZI

FUCKING RETARD TOLD ME BE SMART
SO I GOT BAD GRADES N PREYED THAT HE WOULD DEPART
BUILT UP ANGER FROM A DEEP HEART
SO I WRITE DOWN WHAT MY SOUL SAYS THATS Y I SPEAK HARD
I KICK IT WIT THE STARS WHEN I GET HIGH ENOUGH TO SEE MARS
CLICK NE OF MY TOPICS IS WALKIN IN A PRISON ...
U SEE BARS.

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i actually liked this. even with the fucked structure that it had.. for the most part it flowed well.. with some intresting self hype shit. liked tha fact that you were speaking at the reader. made it much more fun to read.

but that caps lock shits got to go..

\keep dropping

Thanx for feed back...appreciated

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this was aight to me...hmm not over the top great tho...tbh

the structure and scheme was alil hard to follow at times...

A LEADER IS BORN FROM MOM NO PAPI
STEP DAD TREATED ME LIKE A JEW N HE WUZ NAZI

FUCKING RETARD TOLD ME BE SMART
SO I GOT BAD GRADES N PREYED THAT HE WOULD DEPART
BUILT UP ANGER FROM A DEEP HEART
SO I WRITE DOWN WHAT MY SOUL SAYS THATS Y I SPEAK HARD
I KICK IT WIT THE STARS WHEN I GET HIGH ENOUGH TO SEE MARS
CLICK NE OF MY TOPICS IS WALKIN IN A PRISON ...
U SEE BARS


but this part stood out to me..esp if its tru^^^

keep doin ya thing...1

i dig this shit man...
but i go with wat defiance said....
stop the cap shit, n some lines were too short
tho.. it might flow beta from u but some readers will not get it str8, so try to make ur syllables equal , not to the extend of being the same in number but it should close,

U nah mean.
keep droppin man

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Thanx for the feed back Yah it wuz tru

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-- Fri Jun 17, 2011 6:43 pm --

Thanx for the feed back Yah it wuz tru

This is cool man i like it. Just turn the caps lock off man lol its like your YELLING THE WHOOOLE THING! lol good written tho man stay up

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Appreciate the feed much..

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Good flow, I love reading fun lyrics like these keep it up bro.

Seemed like a fun verse to write. Aside from the obvious, there were a few funny lines in there. all in all it kept me interested in reading it. Jumped around with the over the top n personal topics used but all is fair.

MY USER NAME SHOULD HV BEEN AWESOME RAPPER

that was lol worthy

haha funny sht man, "IF U SAY IM GARBAGE UR AN AWESOME ACTER
" thats fuckin dope... lol keep droppin just work on flow a lil more, it fell off in a few spots. but overall nice drop.