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Disain - One Love
[video]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=feO5cFm64BU[/video]


As always, criticism please. Well appreciated.

Tha Q and Monumental got to hear what i thought of their songs(sick!!)

Lyrics
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It takes a single microphone to rain stars
I feel away, far
Another planet, another climate
I didn't plan it, i fly it, made it happen
From me i heard the best rapping

My mind's a prison of genius
Yet i've had nothing meaningful
Me and my music, feeling like nobody's seeing us
Bet everything and lose it on a single verse

I see no matter in your looks
Yet i see soul through aged books
Make molds from yesterdays crooks
Form them into what i see of use
Nothing over for me to amuse
Standing , head in a noose.

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Hip-Hop, it is you or me
Love of my life, lone in the sea
I can see it, i can feel it
Life is an endless tease, bitch please
The blood flows in me, this no dream

One heart shares all there is
If i die, i donate it to Joell Ortiz
For he is the god i serve, no cheese(Jeeze')
Godly might, like Pac, Pun and Big

One love there is, my written piece
Stab myself to let myself free
Let the genius flow and imagination spree
This my creed and creative offspring

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It feels like no other thing
To lose hope and nothing over to sing
But i got you, and you got me
To you i will cling, From dust i will rinse
Raise above any height a man's seen

Make the worst the best and the best the worst
Change myself to an epic beast
Say good bye to reality, too easy to beat
Take myself through ice and fire with ease

One love only is guiding me
You know it, you can see
The death of me,in personality
Nothing good has ever been this bad
Life, guide me, for i am sad.

Its not too bad bruv u got a heavy accent im from australia so i get told that alot too. To me it felt like the beat was too slow for you i mean the flow was way too slow. Other than that its not that bad man. But yeh try n pick the pace up bro.

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THanks! The beat felt kind of slow to me at the start. After a while i got to an understanding that indeed, i was too slow for the beat(That's why the abnormal bars system), but i decided to make it a little speedier every verse and just keep myself spelling out shit properly, since words tend to get stuck on my tongue while rapping.

beast beat, yeah the accent was heavy, but the lyrics were decent, the flow was consistent enough for my liking, maybe the pronouncing and delivery might improve your accent more and mixing more etc, but not bad

They always like the beats. I think i just have ear for beats.

I like this but i do feel like the beat didn't fit the emotion of the lyrics...i feel it should be a little more of an aggressive beat...it seems like you were struggling at points to keep the slower pace to me...the vocab was solid and the rhyme scheme was solid although somewhat basic...overall i like it...i am american but i do listen to alot of bk rappers so I am used to these types of accents but it feels you could annunciate a little better...still respect...you got something here it just needs to be tightened up..i'd give 7/10.....one

The thing about the pace of the song is that i felt this as a way slower thing than it really is. When i finally heard it out correctly, i was so deep in to the song with my lyrics and such, that i didn't want to ruin the point with adding extra lines. I feel it as one of the more doper pieces of the last months. Diving up on "Darkness" did good to me.