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ECK

I'ma flip this clip off this 'ade and blow up this whole page, laugh it up from the gut as I piss on this stage,
Did he say piss on the stage?!, who let this emcee out of his cage!?
I'll shoot first on different turf this isn't an idea or phase,
I don't need your thoughts or your praise, I need you ta get out of my face,
In this case you've been misplaced to speak to grown men,
Getta whiff of this shit, it's Project Mayhem,
its a project with pens, tape up your depends,
the suspense is gonna be one hell of a sense,
Get the fuck up all you ladies and gents,
they've been pitchin up tents since the rumors started turnin heads,
we got livin proof that the grass is greener on this side the fence,
hence I'm gonna lift up my pen and show the rest of these ems, pass it like purp now you got the EcK in your sense//

Saint

you see this time Mayhem cant be stop/
cause if you try imma pull out my glock, POP/

we gonna stay active and drop the best collab's while ART just falls apart/
so much that they couldnt even be sold in K-Mart let alone the largest store Walmart/

i got respect for I.L.L while CI was the best crew/
i getting rid of Pandas for good, CI lawyers are getting ready to sue/

James and Rellik better watch their title belts cause there both mine/
but dont take this as a call out yet cause im waiting for the right time/

Meika

Yeah its finntuh be a rap up in this bitch here come project mayhem/
Chocke on my words bitch ill rip outcha vocals because i dont give a dayum (damn)

I could give to fucks less if youre bettter then me or not at least i try/
15 years old and i give off that bad bitch vibe/
Let the game begin im comin after you bitch dead or alive

Youll be wobblin round like your head got cut of HAHA we is straight shitten on em/
Ive quit alota shit but this my fam and i am not quitten on em

But it is what it is and it aynt what it aynt im only here to make these hoes faint/
I might say nigga to much but clearly i go hard in the paint

Ima have you preachen me like my name was jesus so you can call me youre revrand/
You cant touch me im up in the sky way past heaven

Swaga to mean, chain game crazy, sho game insain/
Gota keep it legit freshiest bitch in the game

Gimme a pen and paper and wach me start to murk thes hoes left to right/
Then wach them start to reseint ne bcuz im taken off in flight

Let project mayhem catch you slippen once or twice/
Well run up on em and end all these mutha fuckas lifes !

LMFAO what a fucking joke, I'll fuck your mum with your "glock" pussy. Eck and meika, ok verses but you need to drop the little bitch you lot are rolling with.

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32neilz wrote:LMFAO what a fucking joke, I'll fuck your mum with your "glock" pussy. Eck and meika, ok verses but you need to drop the little bitch you lot are rolling with.

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dayum... tell us how you really feel


You all could use some elevation....
"You know what this is? A wing, and you are under it. All three of you, right there." Drillbit Taylor
I will guide you..

anyways yeah like 32 said, very basic rhyme scheme, bearly a flow - structure messed up.. but you gotta start somewhere


Another words work on syllable count, vocabulary, rhyme scheme... with time it will come more naturally

And if that don't work, saint could always hang himself.

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this was a pretty cool collab not a big ohhhh shit these guys are dope type of thing..buuut I think Meika had the rawest verse simply cuz it had more of a fuck yea this is how I roll vibe...2nd guy was cool....first had more of a dissing vibe...3 different styles blended...but it wasnt what I woulda expected at first...still good nonetheless

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Ecks:

I think you clearly had the best verse here. You got a decent flow, which I think is the first step. Next you need to work on multies. I see you had some inner rhymes here and there, which is good. Get those multi-syllabic rhymes going. After that, start throwing in metaphors and punches and what not.


Joe Saint:

You got nothing right now, sorry. First things first, work on that flow. Start counting your syllables. The don't always have to be exact but they should be close.

you see this time Mayhem cant be stop/9
cause if you try imma pull out my glock, POP/11

we gonna stay active and drop the best collab's while ART just falls apart/18
so much that they couldnt even be sold in K-Mart let alone the largest store Walmart/22

i got respect for I.L.L while CI was the best crew/13
i getting rid of Pandas for good, CI lawyers are getting ready to sue/20

James and Rellik better watch their title belts cause there both mine/15
but dont take this as a call out yet cause im waiting for the right time/17

I marked your syllable count at the end of each line so you can see how disparate they all are. So, that would be the first thing I think you need to work on. After that, you can try and get some multies going. Lastly, check your spelling and grammar. It can go a long way towards how people perceive things when they read your verse.


Meika:

Your flow is better than Joe's but still needs work. I appreciate that you had some wordplay here and there in your verse. Same thing I said to Joe and Ecks. Check your syllables and then try to work on multies. I see some potential in your writing. Keep at it.

Thinks im getting better eh

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Nice verses Eck and meika just work on putting some mulities in. Joe your verse just sucked some big cocks

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Ted Bundey wrote:Nice verses Eck and meika just work on putting some mulities in. Joe your verse just sucked some big cocks

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LMFAO!

This wasn't anything incredible. Meika, I like that you try and you do have lots of potential in my opinion. You're just going to have to keep at it and continue writing as much as possible. Ecks, you have alot of potential too, just have to come more correct with your delivery and wording in some spots. Not too bad of a collab, but soon Collectively Ill will show ya'll how its done lol. Be easy.