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[video]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jk5dorgQ ... ideo_title[/video]

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[soundcloud]http://soundcloud.com/crashlandingmarz/this-or-that[/soundcloud]

Just lookin to make this shit as dope as I can. I've been writin forever, but this is the first solo track I've recorded. If you like it, please subscribe to the youtube! Thank you. Willing to return the feedback, just drop me a link.

-- Sat May 28, 2011 2:01 pm --

Wait a second, I'll go comment on some other people's and post it here, I didnt know yet.

-- Sat May 28, 2011 2:07 pm --

http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/exerc ... ml#p172449

http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/wit-w ... ml#p172450

Classic beat of course...

Can't honestly take this seriously as a song because of the fact you rapped over a classic beat...But...as a spit...it was cool...you have a dope voice...


Keep droppin




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Thanks for the feedback bro. i can respect that opinion. If you got somethin you need reviewed, just post the link.

Your too relax on the beat, the beat has more energy than u...The interesting thing is that ur lyrics are asking for more emphasis because they aren't bad, just needs a better delivery, so just work on adding a lil passion in ur verse, otherwise not bad man...

Livenlearn wrote:Your too relax on the beat, the beat has more energy than u...The interesting thing is that ur lyrics are asking for more emphasis because they aren't bad, just needs a better delivery, so just work on adding a lil passion in ur verse, otherwise not bad man...

basically said it all.
your just to relaxed, if you put some energy into your vocals it would come off really nice.
flows on point, and the lyrics are decent..not an overly lyrical track at all, but at the same time you fit the old school sound and vibe with what you preformed in the lyrics.
i liked it, theres just room for improvement.
keep at it man.

RTF: http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/game- ... 22172.html

Put some energy into the track - get into your lyrics ---
lyrics were cool but you need to have a stronger delivery

overall not bad -catchy hook... but also could have used the energy

--- polish the energy up and u this track will be a banger.. at the end of 2nd verse your flow seemed liked to your syllable count changed which through off your flow and sounded like u was chasing beat

Thanks for the feedback yall. Ill be sure to work on that energy! Hell, I might even redo this one down the road. Lol.