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this battle keeps getting taken down.. idk who is doing it but im posting it one more time.

simple battle

6 bars

due in 24 hours after check in

this is my check in

gl

Shit I forgot we arranged this.
Chizeck, good luck bro

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-- Fri May 20, 2011 11:16 pm --

Well here goes....

I'll put money on this kids head like a new-era-hat, fuckin pussy arv man... few-fear-your-rap// your style stinks  I don't wanna be too-near-your-crap//

I'll spit swords to leave arv-decapitated-clean// he's a crackhead who's habit is starved as I eradicate-this-feind//

Shatter your ribs with words impacting like slugs outta gunz// leave you unable to breath- just like when you "punctured lungz"//(he beat lungz)

Fifty seven wins... I must admit that I'm impressed// but I'll be making my mark with the sixteen that managed to conquer arvinces test//

Neilz is one that arv has no hope of stopping// he can be benzino, I'll be em and put a "nail in tha coffin", do yourself a favour and don't log in//

Unstoppable emcee? Maybe, but that was only until he met-me// I'm pretty sure it'll take a while for arvincible to forget me//

Peace bro

10 wins? pfft..


Lets just see..Neilz cant touch me, better yet stand next-to-me..
or this legacy, its sad to say at 32 ur still not a damn vet-to-me!!

Understand the message... kid Im not the type to mess-with,
Get-this..His name stands for "head count" n i aint talkin bout a census!

its senseless, fresh punches win..ur lines miss an innovating-entrance..
while Arv is putting 3 in a hole.. similar to ur girl's fingerbating-sessions!!

Dont forget to mention, this scrub aint contestin..he lacks many-skills
And its obvious you lyin in your name kid!! u really ain't "N-E-IL" !! (any ill)

im much difficult, I stun the imbiciles when i run the principles
and even on SHAQ'S BACK you still couldnt son/SUN Arvincible!!

Ur typical..ive been two years away and you still couldnt try-me-dude!!
"To go" against me still puts u 'in a box' similar to fuckin chinese-food..

uppin

MVGT: ARV

^ killah atleast break it down with a quick category or somethin

punches:Arv
word/nameplay: Arv
flow: Arv (easily)
personals:32
rhymescheme: Arv (easily)

vote:Arv


this was a pretty one sided battle, then again arv holds much more experience and i already predicted a cat sweep, 32 got personals though, arv was slightly more creative

Slightly?

I need to step my game up then shit

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yea u fell off a bit, nothing u can brush up on, im the only one who leaves and evolves lol jk (or am i?) either way good battle, voters get to voting

1-0 arv leads killah's vote will not count until he puts effort to explain

Punches Arv
Personals 32
Flow Arv
Name/Wordplay Arv
Multi Arv
Enjoyment Arv

MVGT Arv

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Evolution wrote:^ killah atleast break it down with a quick category or somethin

punches:Arv
word/nameplay: Arv
flow: Arv (easily)
personals:32
rhymescheme: Arv (easily)

vote:Arv


this was a pretty one sided battle, then again arv holds much more experience and i already predicted a cat sweep, 32 got personals though, arv was slightly more creative

I agree with what is in bold - as for some feedback

32 - u got the multies and flow down, but break your bar up into 2 lines, also set up for a punch also instead of threat words... I'll show you an example.

I'll put money on this kids head like a new-era-hat, fuckin pussy arv man... few-fear-your-rap// your style stinks I don't wanna be too-near-your-crap//

could be re-wrote somewhere along the lines of
Your style stinks, you fear the ring, i'll stick his top like a new era cap
57 - 16! your lucky number 7 cuz like the center of your sig i'll make your world pitch black
bleh not really a direct punch nd its stretched... but im just giving you an example to play around with his name/record/etc. evverything else u can diss about your opponent and make it connect..

vs

well you seem like you got a good grasp on things... so

vote = Arv