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8 bars/16 lines
24 hour deadline to drop.

the rest of the house rules apply unless said differently and agreed upon

as a test battle the loser will not be penalized with a loss, compliments of being first time battlers


GL to you both

Karma your raps would be a little better with some similes/
Like Karma,Faggot,Pervert,Transvestite,Freak/
I'm hot, you need more then college to reach my Degrees/
Karma is exactly what you receive when you begin to speak/
This is the rap game kid this aint the fuckin runaway/
You claim your a male model your probably good at the the run-away/[Runnin Away]
I went first so you cant flip the verse but now Im gonna end it/
This is my first battle and im Determined on winning it/
You used hand jobs to get to the top so maybe you can handle this/
Cut you bit by bit, limb by limb, than leave your bars split/
How the fuck you gonna be a model and pursue the career of an MC/
The only thing that goes together there, is the cover of your CD/
I already know your whole reply/
First your going to rhyme my name with some multis and a punchline/
Than youll add abit of wordplay in think thats what the voters like/
Then you repeat my lines and try to mock them with somewhat clever replies/
Your nothing far from the average battler/
I just predicted the whole battle, now what you gonna add to your verse?/


Good luck Karma. Much respect bro!

-fucking with karma? you must be really into beastiality/
-its like you ran into my words on accident the way im speaking tragically/
-im dropping knowledge on you that have you leaking sadly g/
-and i know im the shit have you sniffing like an allergy/
-you spit fire? i'll jump into your lava pool come out colder than eskimos/
-cus your hotter than my cold heart,verses biology,im dissecting thos/
-you couldnt keep your bars hard,well as far as erection goes/
-fuck this stupid bitch,i dont got manners im not respecting hoes/
-the only way people would look up to you if your hung from the ceiling/
-heavy weight vs steve erkul, the way im battling a weakling/
-cut you in lil pieces and burry this rapper like where the remains at?/
-dude you couldnt remain smart if i placed a book where your brains at/
- bars are not stopping me from running you over, tied up to a train track/
-and you wouldnt have crazily dope rhymes if you sniffed insane crack/
-so just grab a pen and pencil cus i'll give you a metaphorical lesson/
-is karma better than remain?please...thats a rhetorical question/

each bar out of 10

REMAIN

Karma your raps would be a little better with some similes/
Like Karma,Faggot,Pervert,Transvestite,Freak/

looked like you were just telling him how to improve nothing big 5/10


I'm hot, you need more then college to reach my Degrees/
Karma is exactly what you receive when you begin to speak/

nice bar just no ryhming 7/10


This is the rap game kid this aint the fuckin runaway/
You claim your a male model your probably good at the the run-away/[Runnin Away]

nice 7/10

I went first so you cant flip the verse but now Im gonna end it/
This is my first battle and im Determined on winning it/

eh. this was alright 5/10

You used hand jobs to get to the top so maybe you can handle this/
Cut you bit by bit, limb by limb, than leave your bars split/

This was nice 8/10

How the fuck you gonna be a model and pursue the career of an MC/
The only thing that goes together there, is the cover of your CD/

again nice bar 8/10

I already know your whole reply/
First your going to rhyme my name with some multis and a punchline/

nice the flow was just off 7/10

Than youll add abit of wordplay in think thats what the voters like/
Then you repeat my lines and try to mock them with somewhat clever replies/

LOL 7.5/10

Your nothing far from the average battler/
I just predicted the whole battle, now what you gonna add to your verse?/

not the best closer 5/10


bitchitskarma


-fucking with karma? you must be really into beastiality/
-its like you ran into my words on accident the way im speaking tragically/

eh 6/10

-im dropping knowledge on you that have you leaking sadly g/
-and i know im the shit have you sniffing like an allergy/

LOL this was dope 9/10

-you spit fire? i'll jump into your lava pool come out colder than eskimos/
-cus your hotter than my cold heart,verses biology,im dissecting thos/

WTF 4/10

-you couldnt keep your bars hard,well as far as erection goes/
-fuck this stupid bitch,i dont got manners im not respecting hoes/

AGAIN WTF 5/10

-the only way people would look up to you if your hung from the ceiling/
-heavy weight vs steve erkul, the way im battling a weakling/

FLOW WAS OFF BUT BESIDES THAT IT WAS BETTER 6/10

-cut you in lil pieces and burry this rapper like where the remains at?/
-dude you couldnt remain smart if i placed a book where your brains at/

NICE NAME PLAY 7/10

- bars are not stopping me from running you over, tied up to a train track/
-and you wouldnt have crazily dope rhymes if you sniffed insane crack/

FLOW WAS OFF. WTF 2/10

-so just grab a pen and pencil cus i'll give you a metaphorical lesson/
-is karma better than remain?please...thats a rhetorical question/

BRAGGIN AND REALLY BAD CLOSER 3/10



REMAIN-59.5/80
BITCH-42/80

MVGT-REMAIN

^ i disagree i think the ending was good but anyways

punchlines:karma
personals: none that i know of
rhymescheme: karma (easily)
flow:karma
creativity:karma (much more metaphorical in a sense)

vote:karma

just some notes for u two to pick up on, starting with remain:...a few of your rhymes just don't rhyme that well at all, and that run away line.. i get the concept but i believe its called a run way not a run away, either too much or too little thought was put into that line and u rhymed the same words...., and to karma:...your flow needs to be more consistent, your rhymescheme rises and drops like mixed feelings, which is almost how i felt reading it, and that bars hard line was pretty gay, and to both of you:...there's way too much filler

by the same point system used above i calculated this..

remain - 8/80
karma - 20/80

damn I had a really hard time voting on this battle.. both of them did pretty good... but my vote goes for karma. His flow was good... rhymes were good, and the creativity was great. "Karma your raps would be a little better with some similes/
Like Karma,Faggot,Pervert,Transvestite,Freak/" that was remain's best line in my opinion... nothing personal but my vote is for karma.

punches - karma
flow - karma
personal- none
creativity- karma

MVGT- KARMA

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Flow: both had lines that had the flow being thrown off, there was a bit of filler too. I'mma give this catergory to karma he just had a slight edge over remain

Personals: can't really see any, you got to make use of these they can win you a battle sometimes

Wordplay / Multies: both had some nice lines and rhymes, though karma did have some simple multies which gives him that category. wordplay I would say is tied

-im dropping knowledge on you that have you leaking sadly g/ -and i know im the shit have you sniffing like an allergy

^ that was nice

Punches: Karma went at his opponent harder I thought, Remain had some nice concepts but hardly any real punches.

Overall: was a decent battle but Remain didn't really go at his opponent I feel, there were no personals from both sides. Karma gets my vote here 'cause he had more and better punches and rhyme schemes.

Mvgt: bitchitskarma

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4-1 Karma wins by TKO, as a test battle remain will not receive a loss


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