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feeds(this how it works? I forget):
http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/made- ... 22152.html
http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/make- ... 14-15.html

the last recording I did.

EDIT: i uploaded a different version of this track. Not much different but it's the one I put on the tape.

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i think ive gone insane,i did what you told me, i sat and i prayed
but i really don't think the voice im hearings godly
it's me, tyrone, live and die on my own
nothing but flesh and bone, no place here for a soul
im an animal, unconscionable, what do i care?
i nail girls and then treat em like my dick was never there
i friend people up, then stay alone in my lair
family ties, i cut em then fly in the air
i leave behind despair and yes i know that it's not fair
but my happiness within is just something i cannot share
what i beware? they criticize and laugh and jeer
my loved ones in name only treat me like a foolish square
dismissively they stare and then they say my fears not there
but they know not what they say so I don't keep anyone near
nobody else is here, i close my eyes and like my fear
they dissapear and take with them all of their yearning leers
ideas around careers and makin babies with my dear and kissing the almighty's rear im thinkin all that shit is queer but i wont say cause i don't care
we all need something to hold onto who am i to say that you're a fool for grasping at your thin air prayers
i talk to myself too, therapeutic as a doob
doobin up is ritualistic as my kiddie id breathes it in
he becomes realistic, i intrinsically envision how to keep this kid from fittin
stuff his face with television
ultra violence on my hard drive playin
that damn sure aint enough thats why i got the ps trayin
classic vernacular, i call it vidya gamin
gotta keep him fed with something filled with sugar canin
insubordination, i'd like to avoid
my kiddie id has power, and it is to annoy
internally he screams and seams begin to split my mind
my mind is the connection to my brain ergo behind
so my body's being racked by manic energetic cry
i focus and i channel to convert the static vibe
the power is unstable and it's threatening my life
but i have to stay alive and you can't live without your mind
mind brain body, trinity of human life
mind brain body, no two lights are same alike
it's the symbol of our lives, living loving flashlights
stick the brain in fit it, plus and minus, set it right
wind the crank and spin it, watch the doll sit upright
watch it's eyes get so bright, watch it learn read and write to document it's awesome fights
watch it kill, watch it maim, watch it slave then say sorry
slave again, kill a friend, add to the tally that makes ten
there is evil in all men and no it cannot be repent
it is the incompatibility between the mind and head
the head knows what is best, but the mind acts indirect
because the body is accustomed to the milk of brothers breast
life within a quasi-civilised society
is the best that one can do barring the pirate life at sea
least i'll be long dead i hope when brother gets a big head
the cycles never end

ok man, first off, welcome to illest. now second, WHY THE FUCK CANT I FIND THIS DAMN SONG ON SOUNDCLICK?! i searched tyrone huggins, i even searched, inarcissist, and nothing. since i dont have speakers here at work, i have to hear it thru my phone. you can OBVIOUSLY see im tryin to give you good feed, so untill i get home and knock it on the comp, i dont want you to think that your drops wont get fed here. so here is PART of my feed.

based on the lyrics, this is definetly some well thought out shit. you have above par vocab which tells me your arent just another dr. seuss rapper. (cat, hat, bat, sat, gat, typa shit) im tryin to flow it with a random beat, and so far, the flow seems pretty smooth. damn i wish i had speakers right now. but i dont wanna forget about this, so i decided to at LEAST give you some feed on the lyrics. so, good job on that. ill come back and edit my post when i hear the actual track.

meh, not really feelin it. just preference i get.
flow for the most part is on, i think its the style of the way you use your vocals to present your track. you sound hella monotone, as if your just reciting whats on a paper an not feelin it. presence is blah, and the delivery is weak.. content of it though is pretty nice, which is a plus. just think you should re-think the track on a sound bases, i duno though; this might be how you wanted it to sound.
keep at it.

weird style man, reminds me of some aceyalone shit.

but good shit, constant flow. but the lack of emotion really killed it for me

but keep it up my dude welcome to illest

Loon E Lou: thanks for the effort, trying to give me a feed and all. I really appreciate it. I'm glad that you got it to flow well on a random beat. Not really surprising though since I usually match up my rhymes and beats randomly until I find the right feel for the words. Thanks again for trying to get a listen.

Dos: thanks for the critique; you're right on all points. Monotone is because my apartment has thin walls so I hold back a bit and also cause I'm dead inside and don't really have the ability to show much emotion(i'm actually reading off my laptop when I go). I'm glad you gave my flow and the content a plsu though, most important bits to me.

defiance: thanks for the feedback; constant flow is my aim. I set out to cut out everything that I don't like about hip-hop. All the frills like production and choruses and what not. I alter a lot of my recordings to counter the lack of life in my voice. I'll post those at some point

thanks for the feeds!

uhhmmm ..this beat is crazy..

uhh it is monotone..its cuz of the delivery werk on that to elevate...
its lyrically a pretty coo read..but the flo is so consistent
that it seems like ya readin it...
i cant really understand you too well..
haha..its crazy.... da more i listen to it the more i like it..like some wierd hypnotic shyt..haha

uhh yeah the beat isnt that good tho imo...

just keep doin ya thing..like to hear more from ya...

i kinda co-sign TreTru lol