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This is my check

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Ayt,i also set one up lol,lets do it in here,this is my check...droppin time

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-- Sat May 07, 2011 7:54 pm --

A -fagGOT -Asshole, says hell-is -bad? hoe,ur punches WEAK ,and its the weekend you wont beat .At a sunday MEETING{Meat} ,!,st joe is a fake i put daggers in my PRAY,like mailing hate mail to god , is this site gay?no! keep searching for one,

-- Sat May 07, 2011 8:06 pm --

This retard couldnt be hard on a truck loAd of viagra,like smal kids with smal dicks,that cant STAND UP(babies), your ugly bitch,even plastic surgery and make up coudnt get ya a face that appeals,

-- Sat May 07, 2011 8:06 pm --

im gona drop 2 more bars hold up

-- Sat May 07, 2011 8:24 pm --

A real sweet kid,no drinking,sex,or thinkin for himself hes a weak kid ,a saint, what women did he speak to except for himself?,none,but him i widnt blame,not his fault for bein dumb and having no brain,unABLE to stop thinking bout mens asses,look at cane

-- Sat May 07, 2011 8:33 pm --

Make this kangaroo hop,a mommas boy ,JOEy in his mothers pouch ,he gonna no show like the end ofa season of joey bra, you aint flowing tough, ,you suck . . .i turn beef into stake when i see a biter,hurt the heart when i kill this vampire,..

-- Sat May 07, 2011 8:36 pm --

emotional biaaatich...expo.on a post he asked is this site gay ...ayt waiting for your drop joe

-- Sat May 07, 2011 8:37 pm --

oh,and joey is a series on t.v

-- Sat May 07, 2011 8:37 pm --

oh,and joey is a series on t.v,

yo watch while i rip Steels style a-part/
its almost impossible to read like the prices at K-mart/

cut the act J everyone knows you cant battle me or mitty/(has battled Mitty)
be ready to MOVE your IMAGINATION, cause imma but you in your own book Smitty/(IMAGINATION MOVERS is a kid show)

0 and 5 just means you a fake ass rapper/
its time i go to your mom and Slap-her/

for not having an abortion when she had the chance/
i aint talking about OYNX when i say you belong with LANCE/(OYNX AND LANCE ARE FROM POKEMON)

sorry for all the kid shows mentioned
people can now vote

Steel
1st bar:
 I didn't get it, "put daggers in my pray like mailing hate mail to god- is this site gay" maybe I'm missing something, but this felt choppy and had no flow, bit of nameplay- the St joe line.

2nd bar:
Hmmm, the Viagra line coulda worked, but for me it wasn't executed as well as it coulda been, nice concept- just didn't hit for me. Again the rest of it was lost on me, didn't ryhme or even make sense really.

3rd bar:
Man it might just be me but I reallycant catch ur flow, I understand kinda what u were getting at but again it didn't get there. The able and cane shit coulda Been killer.

4th bar:
Yes I caught a SLIGHT glimpse of a (weak)flow, like the tiny wordplay- kangaroo/joey, also the stake/vampire line was nice.

Steel u got to work on ur flow, and execution for me u set em up okay, but flop the punch at the end, keep it up man.

Joe saint
1st bar:
Nice I got the flow, ryhmed nicely, I can't say I got it cos I have no idea about the "prices at k mart" lol, but nice line man.

2nd bar:
Again nice bar, like the way u refered to him battling Mitty, wouldnd have got the last bit without the expo, got it tho, nice.

3rd bar:
Not good, if I didn't already know this was setting up bar 4 I wouldn't think this was any good, but it makes sense in a minute.

4th bar:
I don't understand why these were seperate barz, nice after I realise what's happened lol, yeah the whole pokemon thing didn't do it for me, nice play tho.

Well vote remains the same: joe saint

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Jsteel:

A -fagGOT -Asshole, says hell-is -bad? hoe,ur punches WEAK ,and its the weekend you wont beat .At a sunday MEETING{Meat} ,!,st joe is a fake i put daggers in my PRAY,like mailing hate mail to god , is this site gay?no! keep searching for one,
couldn't catch a flow, no punch, no multies, basic!!!

This retard couldnt be hard on a truck loAd of viagra,like smal kids with smal dicks,that cant STAND UP(babies), your ugly bitch,even plastic surgery and make up coudnt get ya a face that appeals,
where's the rhyme? punch and wordplay are basic...no

A real sweet kid,no drinking,sex,or thinkin for himself hes a weak kid ,a saint, what women did he speak to except for himself?,none,but him i widnt blame,not his fault for bein dumb and having no brain,unABLE to stop thinking bout mens asses,look at cane
you need to work on a better structure for your bars. separate line 1 and line 2 for a better read. try more complex wordplay and punchlines. not elementary

Make this kangaroo hop,a mommas boy ,JOEy in his mothers pouch ,he gonna no show like the end ofa season of joey bra, you aint flowing tough, ,you suck . . .i turn beef into stake when i see a biter,hurt the heart when i kill this vampire,..
got better with the wordplay and punch, but lines don't match. try not to use filler. set up the first line to match so you can execute your punch in the second

Joe Saint:

yo watch while i rip Steels style a-part/
its almost impossible to read like the prices at K-mart/
punch is basic, flow is ok...try more multies, they help alot

cut the act J everyone knows you cant battle me or mitty/(has battled Mitty)
be ready to MOVE your IMAGINATION, cause imma but you in your own book Smitty/(IMAGINATION MOVERS is a kid show)
wordplay is meh, punch is ok...you gotta attack opponent, man!!!

0 and 5 just means you a fake ass rapper/
its time i go to your mom and Slap-her/
NO!!!

for not having an abortion when she had the chance/
i aint talking about OYNX when i say you belong with LANCE/(OYNX AND LANCE ARE FROM POKEMON)
flow is ok, universal punch...didnt like how the third bar set up the fourth...

overall: weak verses from both parties. best advice i can give ya is use less filler, set-up your punchlines, and get personal...Joe Saint edged it for me because of the flow everything else was meh from both!!!


Vote Voided, By RULES- K Pan

This retard couldnt be hard on a truck loAd of viagra,like smal kids with smal dicks,that cant STAND UP(babies), your ugly bitch,even plastic surgery and make up coudnt get ya a face that appeals

vs
for not having an abortion when she had the chance/
i aint talking about OYNX when i say you belong with LANCE/(OYNX AND LANCE ARE FROM POKEMON)

stell got on saint more
i didnt really understand the pokemon thing that coulda been left out
but other then that it was good
vote: jsteel

v/ Joe saint.

This was an awful battle. really was. I mean, how can kids spit this weak with all the grindtimers, punchline rappers out there now...i dont get it... it aint that hard to rhyme a multi and keep a consistent flow.. and no one raps about eachothers mom's anymore, thats so 1990.

JSteel - that was one of the most difficult verses i have ever read. There was zero flow. zero multis. ur structure was horrid. nothing rhymed...

if u guys wants some tips, ask me....please!

v/ joe saint.

Man...

FLOW: JOE
PUNCHES: Tie
Multies: No One
Enjoyment: Joes i guess...

Man... I feel like all of steels battles are one sides cuz his phone is gay and it fukks the structure up and its hard to read


Anyways mvgt Joe..

3-1 uppin for votes

I gotta say I wasn't too impressed by either emcee. It's like I was waitin for punches and lyrical wordplay but they just didnt come at it. I think Steel came hard out the gates but jus didnt connect...and I'd say Saint had the overall better wordplay but coulda got in em better...overall vote goes to Saint in a close one.

4-1 i win

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