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Mind State

Posted: Wed May 04, 2011 5:11 pm
by MonuMental
These latest pieces are introspective observations of the ongoing struggles inside of my own mind that I'm sure everyone can relate to. Sinful urges and resignation to vices and temptation. This is just to clarify for those who may consider the subject matter repetitive.. It's my therapy. Get over it.

My mind state is similar to the death rate after earthquakes,
A blind date where the listener counts bodies in the blood wake,
It's dire straits for a visitor adding integers for a death date,
Sign late and your signature indicates you're a dead weight,
Check in for this lesson get your flesh pressed in bloody jaws,
Muddy paws on this dog from nights running to study flaws,
Orchestrating falls of guards perched atop defensive walls,
Assaulting innocent timid men, kill and pillage without a cause,
Stealthily compelled to be wealthy in my quest to feed,
The hell in me and relishing the tarnished taste so bitter sweet,
Of souls I've rolled in agony, tragically shattering,
Scattering blissfulness and listing "give a shits" on absentees,
I reflect on the derelict state of my compassion unchecked,
Thrashing for life ashen ready to face death when it comes to rest,
While the rest of me left in charge starts to draw breath,
Fills it's breast with toxic fumes seeping from death's mess,
A lifetime of lifelines called and met with busy signals,
Pulling pistols at shadows creeping, keeping my thinking wishful,
Gripping a fat fist full of bullets waiting for my temples,
Pop em like pimples, simple the next victim is MonuMental.

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Re: Mind State

Posted: Thu May 05, 2011 1:32 am
by Defiance
yo this was another good piece man. really digging how you paint a picture with your words. especially that first couple of bars where you had internal and external rhymes that were different from each other.
liking the style man.. keep it up. and quit capitalizing every first letter shits annoying to deal with :lol:

keep um coming

Re: Mind State

Posted: Thu May 05, 2011 3:47 am
by 88SkyLink
this is a nice drop, I like the opening and the closing of you're line

Re: Mind State

Posted: Thu May 05, 2011 7:50 am
by M33Kish
Multies out da ass, shit flowed like 'wawta'. The imagery was off the chain from get go, and the vocab is pretty fuckin decent. It adds an 'intellectual' feel to the piece especially since your talk bout your mind and shitm, so that was pretty friggen cool.
Nice drop.

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Re: Mind State

Posted: Fri May 06, 2011 1:22 am
by Ryth
Dope man, I love it.
The imagery is incredible - informative without being pretentious.
As for the vocabulary it's just the way I like it, and you keep a nice flow throughout the whole thing.
I can't see anything in this piece I would like to see changed.

Keep it up!

Re: Mind State

Posted: Sat May 07, 2011 2:04 pm
by ETL
imagery spot on "muddy paws on this dog from nights running to study flaws " spot on line

Re: Mind State

Posted: Sun May 08, 2011 9:34 am
by QwarterZ
i'm feeling this man, it really has the fuck all this vibe
but it stays lyrical throughout and it's just not you venting
it keeps my attention which is dope...very nice piece though!