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16 Lines/8 Bars
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Chekk in both of you and good Lukk...

--Pest

Check and good luck bro

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check G/L

-- Tue Apr 26, 2011 5:24 am --

why ya playing the scripts wrong like an adled gamer
this kid a (parapalegic) like joe's family guy disclaimer!!

this-clown-do-no-harm-..with malicous claws like lambs amoungst lions..
so why joe bitten (joe bidden) like obama's votes had flaws!!

in-this-typo-im-climed-as-the-ripper .
you an overated hitter coz joe's just a tamed as a yankee clipper (joe Dimmagio)

this-saint-can-die-a-recluse.
he declined from the top .cuz-this-saint-cant-fly thats no excuse for a(n) unsuccessful drop!!

if yet to see this nazi get his fame back
the-only-time-mean-joe(green) gets-his-name called if we brought steelers ring back!!

butt..this saint full of lust-like i boasted euphoria
coz [js] couldnt play the game like a dull java script tutorial!!

and.. im over j like trails of being ethered!!
a saint leader naw..he only drops dimes if his cars was being metered!!

also..this-fake-cradle-his-fam
ya-only-search-for-grams-when-soda-slip's-from-his-hand!![/u]

this Hawk is trying to be Black but hes only going Down/(black hawk down)
and i aint talkin bout no kids movie when i say Josh is a clown/(josh is main character in movie black hawk down)

it may be night but my sight is perfect like theres a light on inside the house/
imma squash this dyke till hes flat like a kite then throw him like a dead mouse/

nights verse is gonna say error again like with a mac/(mack)
his girl went to lick his dick and realized there was no ball sac/

he couldnt handle the Grim reaper in round one/
then why is he trying to be ILL, your done/

Alright, hawk... What-is-up-with-this? You can some good concepts with effort but they still felt weak due to wording. I will commend you on following the battle rules, which I can't say about your opponent. All in all the flow needs polishing as well as the (/)-;?:),/?--- you randomly placed every where in my opinion. But not too bad for newbs... I've seen worse.

Saint, you were a little better executing your concepts bu still rather basic. Take a couple stabs at multies and better name flips. Not the worst I've read, but no where close to the best. One thing above all is READ THE RULES. it plainly states 8bars/16 lines... Ummm yeah.


Both were not so impressive but I can see if both practices the basics you guys can become real good... Eventually. All in all MVGT hawk. Not reading the rules is dummy like, killed you in all sincerity saint.

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I pretty much co-sign with Panda..paying attention to the rules is important and because of that Hawk got the advantage with content....both verses were so-so but potential is there for both....all in all....

MVGT: HAWK

You both need to come with more complex schemes though and be more clever with your punches although i doo give credit for the attempts at word play..keep at it

@Nighthawk...I don't understand your structure, but lucky for you I understood your flow. This-is-not-a-multi when-you-hyphen-for-no-reason.
Read the text battle rules to understand the way things are 'round here. Not good, but not too bad.

@Joe...It's obvious you can rhyme simple words. Try switching it up and getting more complex with it. You'd be amazed what your brain already knows. As for the battling aspect yo you are gonna need to bring it and be more personal and put some punches in there that hurt. Take the same advice I gave Nighthawk. Oh and by the way...every bar=2 lines.

MVGT:Nighthawk

3-0 Nighthawk...

close it...


Nighthawk Welcome to ILL