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the misery.. commiserated in 4/5ths of me
i tend to be endlessly searching for an end to me
while chasing hollow thoughts down the road
with out control i'm searchin but havent found my soul
i doubt im whole.. i live like i'm split in 2
one wants good while the other doesnt have shit to do
but spit the blues and be full of negativity
its got me locked in cages while i beg for visiting
it breaks me physically mentally tearing down boarders
bearing arms while i wonder what this swords for
made to order shit i must be manically depressed
findin hatred every time i stare at my flesh
popping dex while sippin lean to run away
so i'm doing drugs clocking thugs probably to get drunk today
my lucks away so i'm staring at the bank with foul intents
loading my shot gun cause i'm too foul to vent
now i'm in crowded pen cause my ideas were so construed
staring at my reflection feeling so confused
wondering what my shallow thinking led me to

I love pieces like this....heart felt feel to it..good emotion..nice use of multies...and the flow/structure was on too for me....the opening 4 lines really pulled me in and you held it up rather well thruout the piece...nice drop

-- Thu Apr 21, 2011 3:44 am --

I love pieces like this....heart felt feel to it..good emotion..nice use of multies...and the flow/structure was on too for me....the opening 4 lines really pulled me in and you held it up rather well thruout the piece...nice drop

great work, really felt this, flow was on it. keep up the good work

This was ill. Diggin the style. Descriptive yet subtle. Good rhyme schemes and imagery. Very dope piece. Very relatable material but still has the artistic twist. Props.

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upping this piece

I say this is fuckin sick as well. I relate heavily to these pieces. We're all there sometimes.

"chasing hollow thoughts down the road
with out control i'm searchin but havent found my soul
i doubt im whole.. i live like i'm split in 2
one wants good while the other doesnt have shit to do
but spit the blues"

yo i loved the flow read it the 1st time like i had already gone over it once i enjoy reading pieces like this you got a lot of raw talent cant wait to read more