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Its a collab witta homie... you can hear his verse
When its recorded. Second verse is the last verse on it... We using the whit enoise beat i posted in producers lounge or what not


I pay no attention to these fake fukks-
Cuz in Reality, its straight fatality, Get laid up n mouth tapped shut-
Talk shit, watch as time slips and ya life ends painfull-
Talk like ya big, But ya walk the walk i'll break your ankles-
Kamakazie walking softly, slice n cutt like chop meat-
Toss ya Body, Talking godly but ya got nothin on me-
cuz ima, Killer, Skizto, watch me flip-modes like busta-
rush ya, busta ya, Dusta ya, dogg, No Need to touch ya-
I Love to feel life fade, Unlock your soul witha blade-
Serrated Serenade, La La Laaaaa, Now Watch me orchestrate-
Wavin The Blade, Blain is Insane, pavin the way for my love-
artisticly minded misfit, Switch flips quickker then shit for the blood-
Flip Quicker then shit for the love of the blood, The Love Of the screams-
The love of the dreams, Twisted illusions, the love of the streams-
The Love of sound of the thud of the blood when it drips n it drops (when it drips n it drops)
Grabbin ya ahead and im rippin it off, Slit witta saw, Gettin it raw...

(Hook)
Steel Blade Sharpened, Ready to hit Notes
Heart is hardened n darkend ready to slit throats-
At the podium, Orchestra Before Me-
Clear my throat, lets keep this really gory-

(Chorus)
Serrated....
Serenade......




Sweet Melody Gots wantin to do aa two step...
so Whos Next? Who's Necks? But really, whos next to lose necks...
Ginsu in you, clean thru tissue, cant believe its not butter-
First it be you and then its ya mother, Gettin ya father ya sisters n brothers-
A Sick Mind, Fiend, disaster, Shimmer in my eyes from the Knife Gleam-
Blade is my pen, Ya chest is the canvas for my psychotic rhyme schemes-
Try Me, Im Grimey, Kinda like a Murderous Hobo-
I've Upd My Gangster, Only Kids are keen to throw Blows-
Ima Cold Piece On No Sleep, Glazed eyes, Heart Has Hardend quick-
Part of it is my New Knife, ready to go, Already sharpened it-
It isnt hard to stick, Ive practiced on your neighbors Retarded Kid-
Then Fukked his mother in the asshole with it, Now its hard to sit-
Im commin for Johnny Boy Quick, Call your mom, now you say goodbye-
You finna be a TV star, On a thousand ways to die-
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i like this shit man, good flow for the most part, like the inner rhymes with in a rhyme shit feeling that

good shit, wasnt really feeling the hook but i guess its all in how you say that shit

thanks def.. uppin more feed if any..

The flow and inner ryhmes was amazing. Wasnt really feeling the hook but besides that it was beast kept it up

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More added..

You definitely got a killer flow and rhyme scheme going on here. I, unlike the others, was really digging the hook. The content is meh, but you certainly managed to present it in a much more creative way. You just need to finish that second verse.

workin on it...
got tired of the beat

WHAT UP BITCH JUST WANTED YOU TO KNOW I DIDNT READ THIS SHIT AND I WONT READ ANY OF YOUR PIECES OR VOTE ON YOUR BATTLES BECAUSE YOU WERE ON SOME DISRESPECTFUL SHIT WITHOUT WARRANT AND YEAH I KNOW YOU DONT NEED MY FEED OR INPUT VOTES AND WHAT HAVE YOU BUT JUST LETTING YOU KNOW THAT I SAID YOU ARE A BITCH AND YOU WANTED TO KNOW HOW I'D GO AFTER A CREW IT BEGINS NOW

thank you for you constructive gayness...
uppin feed.

:/

no comment on the past 2 comments


either way this was a cool piece
the imagery on it was verrrrrry good
you have a decent vocab on yourself as well
keeps the piece very fluent...
a overall nice piece...could be tighened up a bit
but still dope

UpDated

This piece started off not to bad, the flow was nice but something about it was slightly off, but as it progressed it got better and better, the mutlies picked up with the vocab and everything went together nicely, the topic was followed nicely aswell, dark feel to it, the hook was pretty good shit aswell no doubt, i look forward to hearing this recorded hopefully, keep it coming man

This was pretty good. Some good lines and the flow was decent. I personally dont like the constant two word phrases and found the rhyme schemes really predictable. Id like to see you use more multies. Yeah u use em, but most of your rhyme schemes are only two syllables. It was a good piece but i think u can push yourself harder.

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Its Pretty Basic I know..
Pretty Much Just a Key... Not trying to multie ya know..
i want regular people not to get a headache. haha
but thatnks for the feed mad

Dope! Good read!