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-- Sun Apr 17, 2011 8:38 pm --

Yo...

From the very first moment you entered into this "for-um"
I was like TeddyBear? This guy is a "moron".../

What are you like 14? Your rhymes are "ado-lescent" ,
You lack essence not like is some but like none "no-presence"/

No skills...well...at least no "evidence",
You're just a toy, more of a puppet than the "president" /

So far I don't think that you have won, to me that is "evident" ,
The next time that we battle you'll likely be more "hesitant" /

-- Sun Apr 17, 2011 9:47 pm --

Almost forgot to post these...
http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/32nei ... 21377.html
http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/teddy ... ml#p168424

yo mitty shut your mouth/
ill smack you with your 1 win and 1 loss to make 2 losses go down south/
up your ass and out ya pussy/
bitch likes to cuddle and be mushy/
you couldnt be hard if you were a soda popper/
next time your bitch talks shit imma pop her/
this aint like the 7:30 battle/
you wont come back from 3-1 cause ill beat you with a paddle/

ok...no disrespect but very weak battle...like shit you here from drunks at a party...you both are better....no wordplay..no name play..punches were soft and personals were played out....structure and a better flow and vocab went to mitty..based on that...

MVGT: MITTY

I agree with Grim.

You both coulda took at least 10 more minutes on those verses...

But I like how Mitty made use of some Cool 3 syllable words
"evident" "hesitant" I like that kinda shit

But Mitty you could have set those up a little better with another multi
or two. And try puttin some of the rhyme words in the MIDDLE of the verse instead of always at the end. Dont be Skeered

MVGT Mitty

uppin for votes

Man this was really, really disappointing, Mitty at least you came like u tried to put some effort into your verse, but your better than this.
Teddy this was a really weak verse, not even sure if that was 4barz.
You can both do so much better than this, I know you can.
Mvgt; Mitty

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3-0 me.