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This is a battle for the best 8 bar verse...more of a bragadocious battle..not directly attacking...please judge who creates the better overall verse...more like a topical....24 hour due date from check in...house rules.
Judge On:
Creativity:
Flow:
Structure:
enjoyment:
multies:
wordplay:
this is my check

Cool Grim. Lets Paint these Pages





"Words are Weapons"

-- Sat Apr 16, 2011 7:46 pm --

check (echo) CHECK! (ECHO!)

OK Griminal. It's working.




"Words are Everything" ML

So much “flow” and I’m “fly”..I’m the RIVER PHOENIX.
You couldn’t dry your eyes with a million kleenex.
I’ll stretch you out “dirty” like filthy v-necks.
I hang with the hoolagens and roll with rejects.
I ain’t playing games so you can’t hit reset.
Get stung with my words each verse a bees nest.
Shoot ya with one 9, it feels like 3 techs.
An unwanted blessing like catholic priest sex
My style is the future like I rap in pretense.
A demonic soldier..a demon seed sent..
Here to earth..feeling no fear’s my curse.
The crowd’s my ressurection each cheer’s rebirth.
I just spit ill shit and i don’t rehearse.
Every track I lay down?A thousand times rewound.
Get “cracked” like “eggs”,“whipped” and “beat” down.
I’ll “scramble” your brains you won’t last three rounds.

The word Mack is Celtic, and it means "son". Lazarus arose, That means me.
Put em both together and its straight O.G.

Beyond and before any mob styled negro
was struttin around like Robert Deniro.

I'm talkn Biblical, cyclical, spiritual
light would fill an entire atmosphere with the vastness here

Now watch the Bats appear. As I chase you outa Hell
With RUN DMC in the Back, Rockin' the Bells

Votin sweeps? Im embarrased and ashamed for you now (punch)
I say whats up right when i see it go down (brag)

girly twirps circle jerkin with each other behind the curtain (slap)
just like the wizard. I sure hope you get what you dizerve, then (kick)

You got nerve, friend...honesty's the old policy. Obviously. (spit)
Its not enough to see me exhibit these tricky vocal photographies? (me me me)

Dont let this be another Hip Flop mockery. Stop the debauchery. (water on the face)
"There can only be one" you see apostraphes? ( guess who.)

Flow-mack
Creative-mack
Structure-grim
Wordplay-grim
Mulities-tie
Enjoyment-mack

MVGT- MACK

grim youre verse look like you were still dissing him

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Flow: grim
creatvity: mack
structure: grim
wordplay: grim
multies: draw
enjoyment: mack

although mack had the enjoyment and creativness, grim took all other cats in my opinion.

Mvgt: grim

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Flow-Grim
Creative-Mack
Structure-Grim
Wordplay-Grim
Multies-Grim
Enjoyment-Mack

You're getting closer Lazarus. Try incorporating some from each category to get if from every angle. Promise I'm not hating...
MVGT: Grim

2-1..upping for votes