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alright fellas here go a banger! lemme know what you think

also heres my 2 links

http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/outst ... ml#p167889

http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/don-l ... ml#p167890

ok, this is ok. that hook could be dope. you gotta find the right pitch and delivery for it. but it could work. you gotta fuck with the levels in a major way. you fall off here and there but for the most part, your on point. what you gotta do, is practice your verses till you can spit it almost entirely without your paper. itll tighten up your verses. the 3rd verse sounded the best out of all. you should get a chick to sing the livin in up part. some adlibs wouldnt hurt throughout your verses. all in all tho, this is ok. just tighten up the flow, find the pitch, and finish the hit. this is a good start to possibly a very good lil mixtape track.

thanks famo appreciate it

Fucking Vibe Beats... Enough said


Well the quality is definitely getting better... are you panning your dubs? or recording them two separate tracks alternating which ones come through? The flow is def getting smoother man. Im very happy with your progress, as if im a teacher or somin lol. This is nice man. Showing more confidence. The 3rd verse comes in and leaves nicely. The only problem i see is the same loon pointed out, the hook sounds weird. The ending sounds dope man. That phaser or panning is tripping me out man. NICE drop man.

I feel that you do music for fun and to let loose? ..

I feel the Idea.. The hook has potential because of the direction you took with the concept- so it just needs a smoother flow.

The verses... Nothing special- strait forward is we can relate to-- but your flows not seasoned (you may think I'm buggin now, but one day when you get better you'll look back and be like "oooOo" and it'll click..

third verse and fourth.. Dudes riding the beat fine, vocal tone a lil generic for it (no worries) Content strait forward..


Overall.. Have fun I guess. Keep etchin

appreciate the feed fellas