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5 bars,
House rules,
Due 48 hours after check.

This is my check.

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Cashed.

-- Thu Apr 14, 2011 1:05 am --

Lol this dude asks to battle then waits for me to drop...

Nice avy by the way...

Ayo...


Im like a dog, rip ya throat and give-you-rabies, my spits-is-crazy
The sin-displaying Murk nuts you must hug, that's why M and M in-ya-avy!!!

I 'beat him' without 'biscuits', have dude shitting-'gravy', he needs to wake up and 'break~fast'
M33k like a condom with shit on it, because this dude spittin nothing butt gay~rap!!!
(biscuit is known in the States as a gun)

What else is there to say?~Fag!, My fire spits burn-with-a-Wesson, 'god' I'll 'return-you-to-Heaven'
He's I.L.L.? A lyrical legend? How when everyone on this site has MURK'd-you-in-seconds?!?!?

Make the 'bitch' yearn-for-confession, I'm 'past whore's, you should seek~the~truth~of~lore
This guy begging me to deliver him to the afterlife, even after Grim defeated~you~in~war!!!
(past whore/ pastor}
[lost to Grim in a battle before me]

Anytime I see your verse, guarenteed to repeat~it~as~a~bore, Murk easily demerits-ya-worth
M33K could be known as "God's Sun", and still couldn't "inherit-the-Earth"!!!

McNasty too white-bred,
He couldn’t get it poppin on a white head/
Ill murk this KNUCKLE-head,
Till he KICKS the bucket and spits his country stuff, “snuff”, said./

Ill breeze through Kentucky,
Find this nigga slumpin, in a bum sleep/
Bash his head like rugby,
You commin at me like my city aint show on my tag, Take a look see/

I go too hard for this corn-fed,
Entrust in the-rust, His crushed cab gon be yo best bet/
The only thing you ever repped,
Was panda, I guess yall takin the next step, you callin him your best “pet”?/

Your "crabby pattie," corny,
A lover of man meat, he beats men's buns gladly/
I squash beef crafty,
I went to McDonald's for advice on ways to murk M "McNasty"/

Your flow is too weak,
I'll fuck this freak up, with the 9 piece to put him to sleep/
You can't get bigger than me,
I'm supersized, Mods, just give the win to the meek/

FYI- no dissrespact K PANDA lol just felt like throwing that line in

MURK..

Im like a dog, rip ya throat and give-you-rabies, my spits-is-crazy
The sin-displaying Murk nuts you must hug, that's why M and M in-ya-avy!!!
this was decent but could have made it harder
I 'beat him' without 'biscuits', have dude shitting-'gravy', he needs to wake up and 'break~fast'
M33k like a condom with shit on it, because this dude spittin nothing butt gay~rap!!!
(biscuit is known in the States as a gun)
i get the punch but it seems plated..so it's kinda soft
What else is there to say?~Fag!, My fire spits burn-with-a-Wesson, 'god' I'll 'return-you-to-Heaven'
He's I.L.L.? A lyrical legend? How when everyone on this site has MURK'd-you-in-seconds?!?!?
once again..get the crew flip(ok) and decent punch
Make the 'bitch' yearn-for-confession, I'm 'past whore's, you should seek~the~truth~of~lore
This guy begging me to deliver him to the afterlife, even after Grim defeated~you~in~war!!!
(past whore/ pastor}
[lost to Grim in a battle before me]
like the shout out..lol and nice way to come
Anytime I see your verse, guarenteed to repeat~it~as~a~bore, Murk easily demerits-ya-worth
M33K could be known as "God's Sun", and still couldn't "inherit-the-Earth"!!!
I'm starting to see a lot of the bible play on meek not a bad closer

Meek...still want you to put these four line in to two..better for structure and flow...

McNasty too white-bred,
He couldn’t get it poppin on a white head/
Ill murk this KNUCKLE-head,
Till he KICKS the bucket and spits his country stuff, “snuff”, said./
nice try with snuff but it missed
Ill breeze through Kentucky,
Find this nigga slumpin, in a bum sleep/
Bash his head like rugby,
You commin at me like my city aint show on my tag, Take a look see/
no punch here..more of an answer back type thing.
I go too hard for this corn-fed,
Entrust in the-rust, His crushed cab gon be yo best bet/
The only thing you ever repped,
Was panda, I guess yall takin the next step, you callin him your best “pet”?/
attack murk! this is weak
Your "crabby pattie," corny,
A lover of man meat, he beats men's buns gladly/
I squash beef crafty,
I went to McDonald's for advice on ways to murk M "McNasty"/
not bad but first and second bar could both be set ups for better punches
Your flow is too weak,
I'll fuck this freak up, with the 9 piece to put him to sleep/
You can't get bigger than me,
I'm supersized, Mods, just give the win to the meek/
9 piece was ok...not a strong finisher

over all I would give every cat to murk except nameplay..although played out he used the mcdonald approach...

MVGT: MURK

Murk McNasty

Im like a dog, rip ya throat and give-you-rabies, my spits-is-crazy
The sin-displaying Murk nuts you must hug, that's why M and M in-ya-avy!!!
The multies are nicely placed, but i will say the "sin-displaying" seems forced because it makes the rest of that line, or atleast till the comma read ackwardly. Almost as if what you really meant gets lost in the effort to complete multies.
I 'beat him' without 'biscuits', have dude shitting-'gravy', he needs to wake up and 'break~fast'
M33k like a condom with shit on it, because this dude spittin nothing butt gay~rap!!!
(biscuit is known in the States as a gun)
Now this i can understand, nice display of wordplay. The punch is also very nice. You should have used this as an opener.
What else is there to say?~Fag!, My fire spits burn-with-a-Wesson, 'god' I'll 'return-you-to-Heaven'
He's I.L.L.? A lyrical legend? How when everyone on this site has MURK'd-you-in-seconds?!?!?
LOL, good wordplay, and the fag to leave off on your above bar. But i feel as if the actual punch was not so well worded. Yeah its cool, but the set up line was strong as fuck, the punch was not so much, kind of a played aspect.
Make the 'bitch' yearn-for-confession, I'm 'past whore's, you should seek~the~truth~of~lore
This guy begging me to deliver him to the afterlife, even after Grim defeated~you~in~war!!!
(past whore/ pastor}
[lost to Grim in a battle before me]
i need to seek the truth of lore, cuz i have no idea what that means. Set up, sucks. The punch though, nice personal, and multie tie in with "lore" < wtf is that?
Anytime I see your verse, guarenteed to repeat~it~as~a~bore, Murk easily demerits-ya-worth
M33K could be known as "God's Sun", and still couldn't "inherit-the-Earth"!!!
Im sorry man, this is a weak closer. im already tired of the "bore" rhyme off, especially cuz i dont know what lore means. This just read oddly.

MeeKish

McNasty too white-bred, He couldn’t get it poppin on a white head/
Ill murk this KNUCKLE-head, Till he KICKS the bucket and spits his country stuff, “snuff”, said./
Ok, im imagining thie "white-bred" is a play on his title which he changed. Tisk Tisk. Your first line was simple but made me chuckle. I do like the Snuff use, seeing as the moist snuff originated from america, but the punch itself fell short due to wording.
Ill breeze through Kentucky, Find this nigga slumpin, in a bum sleep/
Bash his head like rugby, You commin at me like my city aint show on my tag, Take a look see/
I dont get it, i see the personal attempt with kentucky, but it stopped after you said kentucky and never really turned into anything.
I go too hard for this corn-fed, Entrust in the-rust, His crushed cab gon be yo best bet/
The only thing you ever repped, Was panda, I guess yall takin the next step, you callin him your best “pet”?/
lol, ill be honest, the punch would be more effective aimed at me, not him. I like the rhyme scheme, but lacked impact towards him.
Your "crabby pattie," corny, A lover of man meat, he beats men's buns gladly/
I squash beef crafty, I went to McDonald's for advice on ways to murk M "McNasty"/
lol, but im sure you know, PLAYED concept. The set up was decent though.
Your flow is too weak, I'll fuck this freak up, with the 9 piece to put him to sleep/
You can't get bigger than me, I'm supersized, Mods, just give the win to the meek/
lol, the set up was better than the punch tbh. The 9 pice wordplay was awesome. But thats about it. Not bad, but could have came harder.

Overall, MVGT MURK MCNASTY.

Both threw played punches, and both fell short a couple times, but the complexity woven into murks verse was solid, which gave him my vote.

Murks last bar was probably the best of them all

I like how they were more complex but still flowed.
Murk was stretchin for somethin out side the box. I like that


MVGT McNasty





"Don't waste pixels on wack words" ML

Murk wins KO

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