Hip Hop Forum

Static wrote:this is the nail in the coffin for the stale and the rotten
the pussies playing possum can lay at the bottom
bitches failing to often to be steadily talking
their fans will be gawking as if i'm impailing the baldwins
The double rhyming is dope, but the Baldwin line is a little stretched, not sure what your meaning to say there. Your opening line was nice by the way
so many strands of weed i'm inhaling them all in
they'll be in awe when holy grail of bossing walks in
from gainesville to boston they'll all think that i'm awesome
spraying away my problems, the AK helps me solve them
nothing too bad, but your beginning to lack direction, like where are we going with this piece?
my resolve is dissolving my revolver makes them whiter then cherry blossoms
i'm out of options grab the shotgun as I spew these toxins so caution
the evidence of my arrogance has been evident ever since
i remembered it and made it relevant, I fell into this decadence
your last two lines where dope man, but the first two lost me in flow.
now i'm as elegant as an elephants excrements, thats my testament
my patience isn't multiple choice, stop testing it
i'm rocking like sediment my abilities are excellent
my music's eloquent so i plan on selling it
nice display of vocab overall, and comparing urself to elephant excrement is weird. lol. Although everything seemed on point, with flow falling off here and there, what was this piece really saying? It more came off like a look mom what i can do type of piece... Nice none the less, just lacked direction.