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Moneymaker vs Jack Da Rippa (JDR wins KO)

Posted: Thu Apr 07, 2011 8:46 am
by JDR
Juss Match me
House rules uno...

-- Wed Apr 06, 2011 5:55 pm --

Somethin' Somethin'...

Look..

Take notice bitch when I get close to kidd, punchlines will close ya lips
You a joke to Rip and if it was ever 'About Money', than I guess I'm 'Broke as Shit'

That's how ya sapose to diss, take notes & tips, 0-3? I laugh at this mans statistics
Damn, I'm twisted, even ya fam can witness how Doe's gettin' layed out like a can of biscuits

They's no upper hand wit Rip's shit, , ya been dissed, so thats the diff between the same & now shit
Like pussy, I aim to pound it, cos I be 'Handlin' Money easy' like a 'Bank Accountant'

Watch me spank and clown kidd, it's foul shit and not fair to a pound a prick
So imma scare and tear ya click, you a man? But the BARE truth is prolly the amount of hair around his dick

Obviously my sorts mean, & you juss fourteen!?! my bars shockly sonned you
I hate to body dumb dudes, and If Money Talks than after this that bitch prolly Runs too

That's like 5 son. Hit it up & I appreciate you accepting it.

Re: Moneymaker vs Jack Da Rippa

Posted: Thu Apr 07, 2011 10:19 am
by Moneymaker
this guy rips his dick off trying to eJACKulate/
hes part of Romeo and Juliet yeah the Lady Capulet/

the rippa has a graveyard full of people/
that he got after lookin into a dudes peep hole/

jack finally meet his match/
like when hes on a wrestling mat/

it aint halloween but Jack is bout to get light up/
im bout to put a new lose in a measuring cup after he gets fucked up/

Rippa looks like jadakiss/
after he came and missed/

Re: Moneymaker vs Jack Da Rippa

Posted: Thu Apr 07, 2011 10:28 am
by Grim
this really doesn't need to be broken down...Jack took every category with relative ease...the one name flip money had could have been way better if he set it up right...this seemed like a warmup for jack..no offense..you are improving money but you need to bring much harder punches..a lot seem to miss...you have good ideas just work on executing them better...
Mvgt=JACK
That's how ya sapose to diss, take notes & tips, 0-3? I laugh at this mans statistics
Damn, I'm twisted, even ya fam can witness how Doe's gettin' layed out like a can of biscuits

My fav line in this battle..

Re: Moneymaker vs Jack Da Rippa

Posted: Thu Apr 07, 2011 10:41 am
by Alvin
Jack - My only complaints are your third and fourth bar are flow-less. Not sure thats a word but you know what i mean. The wordplay was ok, Ive seen better, and punches were direct, as well as proper exectution of name plays. Ive seen better from you, and as good as its an insult to show your opponent your barely trying, its also a form of arrogance, which many people arent fond of. Not like that matters, but thats my review.

Money - you had a decent opener, straight to the name play, but its very short. Nothing is really wrong with that, but if you gave youself more room, you'd have better angles to attack with. The rest rather seemed like filler, no hard hitting punches or anything memorable. Your on your way man, just battle some more.


MVGT - JDR
(if more breakdown is needed, just let me know and ill gladly do so)

Re: Moneymaker vs Jack Da Rippa

Posted: Thu Apr 07, 2011 12:00 pm
by JDR
Thx 4 the votes. Money, I typed that up quick and If I knew you was just starting I would of dumbed it down a lot more so my bad brotha. You don't seem discouraged cos you already called somebody else out but either way, thx 4 tha battle.

Re: Moneymaker vs Jack Da Rippa

Posted: Thu Apr 07, 2011 12:02 pm
by Kuhlerblynd
Jack- Nice wordplay, punchlines, nameflips, and personals. Honestly I like how you came at this one with a little more creativeness than I expected, which is the Jack shit that I like to read...

Money- Bro, you have some good concepts, but the delivery of your punchlines could be worked on. Also, if you make your bars just a little bit longer, it would help your craft as far as developing punches go. Keep at it fam.


My vote goes to Jack.


Thread is closed and records updated. Jack wins KO.