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a rap

Posted: Wed Apr 06, 2011 5:09 pm
by Tripp Bethea
I swear my..shit.. is.. real
and you pussy rappers can be my next meal
my skin is is white but you can deny my skill
got all you dudes sayin "Damn that boy is ill"

Im tha man in this thing and surly
my flow kills like OJ when he came home early
Yo bitch next to me actin flirty
so we gon take it to the crib to do tha dirty
My swag got these lil bitches worried
But if they speak a foul word they will feel my fury

And im hot like im lyin under neath tha covers
Im on top i look i cant see no others
I keep it G and thats word to your mother
and i burn more trees than smoky bears evil twin brother

Re: a rap

Posted: Wed Apr 06, 2011 5:36 pm
by pest
ehh...
4/10

Get some rhyme scheme in it, some creativity, some iltellegence, and non played lines its be better

Re: a rap

Posted: Thu Apr 07, 2011 3:15 am
by AfroSamuraiBlak
Pest wrote:ehh...
4/10

Get some rhyme scheme in it, some creativity, some iltellegence, and non played lines its be better
keep workin bro

-- Wed Apr 06, 2011 12:15 pm --
Pest wrote:ehh...
4/10

Get some rhyme scheme in it, some creativity, some iltellegence, and non played lines its be better
keep workin bro