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-- Thu Mar 31, 2011 5:02 pm --

is that good or u want me to change anything

we're good..this is my check...vote on flow,personals,punches,word/name play....good luck bro

-- Fri Apr 01, 2011 8:17 am --

no flipping or rebutles either..straight up battle

check

To Money's Death...(his crew is TMD)

At 14 years old you ain't making no money
You get sick and tell mommy you ache in the tummy.
You fucking actress, go practice,come back and get your ass whipped.
That's it!!I've had it with the garbage pail trash bitch.
Go home Money..the street lights just clicked on..
Tell your mommy that you're crying cause you just got picked on.
Broke as fuck, you got no job and I know you don't sell..
This walking contradiction is a MONEYMAKER? What the hell?
Your age alone means your nothing major you fucking minor.
step in my world and get your ass ROBbed like mr. Riener.
I remember 14 years ago I fucked a bitch who looked like your mother.
Damn Money...I mean sonny..FUCK..I should've wore a rubber!

Ayo, watch this G get a L like he was wished good luck/
Moneymaker a noob but fuck with me and get ya tooth plucked/
Ya coof crushed,brain matter splattered like a squashed fruit gush/
When I'm done you gone be in all black like you covered In soot son/
He aint the Grimm Reaper, hes the Grimm Raper son, hes a 41/
Year old pedophile tryna get wild on a child thats his only son/
Everytime Grimm arrive the elderly laugh n kids scream stranger danger/
Grim the type of sick fuck to stick his one-inch dick up in a baby's manger/
I'm gonna leave Grim flatlined incritical condintion/
Incorperate-it into a fast rhyme to extradite his physical extinction/
lyrically amputate this G's "prick" like hes infested with gane green and syphillis/
Yea hes sick, got a disease destined for "death" he got in molester sector for "feeling kids"/

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GRIMM

At 14 years old you ain't making no money
You get sick and tell mommy you ache in the tummy.
ehhh... okay opener.

You fucking actress, go practice,come back and get your ass whipped.
That's it!!I've had it with the garbage pail trash bitch.
Nice multies but the punch didnt hit hard enuff...

Go home Money..the street lights just clicked on..
Tell your mommy that you're crying cause you just got picked on.
we get this fools young man... Hittem with new shit homie... Change man. Change.

Broke as fuck, you got no job and I know you don't sell..
This walking contradiction is a MONEYMAKER? What the hell?
Okay... Nothing hard but decent

Your age alone means your nothing major you fucking minor.
step in my world and get your ass ROBbed like mr. Riener.
CHANGE IT UP GRIMM!! Punches dont hit quite as hard when you keep going on about the same thing...

I remember 14 years ago I fucked a bitch who looked like your mother.
Damn Money...I mean sonny..FUCK..I should've wore a rubber!
Good closer


Ayo, watch this G get a L like he was wished good luck/
Moneymaker a noob but fuck with me and get ya tooth plucked/
decent first line... 2nd garbage.

Ya coof crushed,brain matter splattered like a squashed fruit gush/
When I'm done you gone be in all black like you covered In soot son/
soot dont rhyme with fruit... so multie factor got tossed... not really a punch here...

He aint the Grimm Reaper, hes the Grimm Raper son, hes a 41/
Year old pedophile tryna get wild on a child thats his only son/
hes only 30 (right?)... if u actually played on his age it would be sikk... other then that this is mediocre

Everytime Grimm arrive the elderly laugh n kids scream stranger danger/
Grim the type of sick fuck to stick his one-inch dick up in a baby's manger/
garbage.

I'm gonna leave Grim flatlined incritical condintion/
Incorperate-it into a fast rhyme to extradite his physical extinction/
man... you need wordplay son.

lyrically amputate this G's "prick" like hes infested with gane green and syphillis/
Yea hes sick, got a disease destined for "death" he got in molester sector for "feeling kids"/
get the fukk outta here...


Multies: Grimm
Punches: Grimm
Wordplay: None Really
Enjoyment: Grimm


MVGT Grimm


Critic: Come off on some WORDPLAY... punches hit harder with wordplay...

No need for a breakdown but what the hell. money, my man, you starting to get a feel for it, keep tryin cause you got it in you to be a straight beast but keep developing your skills.

Flow-grimm
Punches-grimm
Nameflips-grimm
Personals-grimm
Mvgt-grimm

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2-0 me

Grimm's was a little repetitive but this kid couldn't get shit going after that first line. mvgt Grimm

flow:Grimm
personals:Grimm
punches:Grimm
wordplay:Grimm i guess though all i saw was the rob riener line

3-0 me K.O.

I thought three zip was a ko but whatever.. 3-1 me

Static dont count i thought house rules says u need 50 or more posts to vote

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even though my vote wont count im just gonna put my 2 cents in.

Multies: money...grimm had some good ones too
Punches: both had some good attempts but neither were to memorable
Wordplay: neither but money at least attempted some
Flow: grimm's flow was easier to follow but money tried making his more complex
Name flips: money..he made more attacks on grimms name while grimm went after moneys age more then anything
Entertainment: both were entertaining but i think moneys was a bit more enjoyable
even though it dont count overall my vote would go to money.
Money you've made alot of progress in your drops. Work more on your multies wordplay and punches. You've got the potential to be a fucking animal if you keep at it and practice. Grimm you pretty much got everything going for you but i feel you need to also work on your wordplay and your punches. i dont think you put alot of effort into this battle while money put just about everything he had into it. You both could be extremely nasty with some practice. overall decent battle and i'd like to see you 2 go at it again in the future.

so is it 2-2 or is 3-2 me?

my vote doesnt count..i was jus giving my opinion with feedback so it should be 2-1 grimm