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SCREWED UP

Posted: Thu Mar 31, 2011 8:16 am
by Grim
If i slit my wrists quick and let it drip.
Would i fade to black? Man..am I this sick?
Barrel in my mouth spit the clip till it clicks.
Problems don’t get fixed just by doing this.
All it really does is cause others heartache.
It’s a ritual in which I’d rather not partake.
I’ll wait…there’s no rush to enter the pearly gates.
After all..we’re here on Earth shadowed in Mar’s wake.
Am I that insugnificent? A mere speck of life?
A rain drop on a window paine gone with one wipe?
Or a fly on the wall dead with one swipe?
Am I wrong to feel something isn’t right?
We all strive, in our efforts, to be noticed.
Keep focus on material things..become soulless.
And struggle to stand alone like our bodies are boneless
I wish I could disappear just by screaming..“Hocus-Pocus”

Re: SCREWED UP

Posted: Thu Mar 31, 2011 8:37 am
by Defiance
yo this shit was cool for what it is, sounds like a poem reads like a poem

man this shit is a poem!!

lol

nah man i liked the opener and middle the most, good imagery good flow
good shit man

Re: SCREWED UP

Posted: Thu Mar 31, 2011 10:50 am
by MonuMental
Pretty cool, bruh. No complaints. Nice flow and imagery. Stay up and keep posting.