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easily my most personal track yet

http://soundcloud.com/the-hand-of-god/1 ... motionless

started writing it in '05 right after my father died to The LOX - Training Day, gave it up for a while, then downloaded some Danger Mouse beats in like '07 and found this one, the verse i'd written 2 years earlier fit perfect with the beat so i went ahead and finished it

left feed for Nah and MonuMental

I like your flow, very conversational, and the lyrics is depressing yet thought provoking. Your style reminds me of Atmosphere. This is some deep shit man. Good stuff.

Awwwww man. I liked this alot. Real deep lyrics, clear, and well executed. Beat fits the subject perfectly. I like how u can take ur problems, troubles, and thoughts and lay em down. You aint the only one who stresses on shit, so this songs speaks for alotta folks. ONLY thing i might suggest is more emotion. Your lyrics flow perfectly, jus sound like ur readin tho. A little emotion in it, puts more the listener in ur shoes even more. Let em hear and feel the pain u might be goin thru ya know? All in all tho, awesome track dawg

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-- Wed Mar 30, 2011 10:14 pm --

Loon E Lou wrote:Awwwww man. I liked this alot. Real deep lyrics, clear, and well executed. Beat fits the subject perfectly. I like how u can take ur problems, troubles, and thoughts and lay em down. You aint the only one who stresses on shit, so this songs speaks for alotta folks. ONLY thing i might suggest is more emotion. Your lyrics flow perfectly, jus sound like ur readin tho. A little emotion in it, puts the listener in ur shoes even more. Let em hear and feel the pain u might be goin thru ya know? All in all tho, awesome track dawg

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-- Wed Mar 30, 2011 10:16 pm --

I dunno what happened there^^^^^

thanks for the feedback and the comparison to Atmosphere haha

Agree with loon, this is a very deep track but the emotion you felt when you wrote it needs to come out some more. But overall the track was nice and you can sense the thought that went into making it.

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thank you for the listen sir

I dig it. Very unique and worth it's listen. Your flow is there, but yet again, it's somewhat off-set. So if anything...you would definitely fall underneath the "Floetic" category. The reason I say that is because your track is very artistic...it's like poetry in motion. So I wouldn't say you're as much of an emcee as much as you are a Floetry artist.

And this is good, because it not only goes to show the variety of artists that wander around here on illest...but the wide array of entertainers that exist in the globe.

I encourage you to keep sharing here on illest and staying diverse with your material, you've definitely got a talent. I give this track a 7/10

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thank you very much sir

i'll put up a more 'emcee' like track later tonight haha

Hmmm I like it but it needs work...Ur style actually isn't too bad for the beat, but the energy as its been expressed in the prior post will do this track wonders, because all of ur lyrics invoke emotion but ur voice doesnt so it falls flat...Ur lyrics are very good, the imagery is clear, and a couple thought provoking questions in there...not a bad listen but the energy and presence needs to shine through...fix those things and u have a masterpiece...